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Reviewer: Footsteps Signed [Report This]
Date: October 20 2021 6:17 AM Title: The S Virus

There are some distracting pronoun errors, like calling him Adam and then saying "I". Also there are times where you say him instead of her when talking about things like ccleavage. 

 

That being said, I think it's off to a great start. If he were to end up around doll sized, it'd be very humiliating if tarah decides to pretend practice breastfeeding him, maybe for a home-Economics or health class, or maybe just for fun to show her sisters how important boobs are. If he gets really small maybe he could end up trapped in her big ass as punishment for talking back. 



Author's Response:

Yo are totally right .. I speak Spanish so usually I write the story in that lenguaje and then translate it with some translator... so some mistakes could happen, I will revise the story completely to avoid them ... thank you 

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