Date: April 03 2023 3:51 PM Title: Chapter 2 - Multitasking
Pretty good, please continue
Date: October 12 2022 1:23 AM Title: Chapter 2 - Multitasking
Well I want to jump in here and say a little something real quick. I wasn't really doing much other than just perusing nano stories and here I stumbled across this one. I've very glad I did.
Besides the beautiful imagery and descriptive language you use to convey the intent of the scene you have an understanding and power to denote scale with words that frankly isn't seen very much anymore. More so than most anything I've read recently I could feel how big this woman was and I loved it! It left me quite impressed. As this was a more recent edition I do hope this story is not concluded. I would love to see where you take it from here! :D
Date: September 21 2022 5:51 AM Title: Chapter 2 - Multitasking
Chapter 2 is here. And I have to say it’s conveyed that sense of scale very nicely. I think the writing prose has even improved too. Chapter is a bit towards the shorter side, but for what’s written, it definitely does well.
Date: September 21 2022 5:47 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The Classroom
Good stuff. Albeit short, but still a nice way to end the chapter.
Your writing style and prose leaves a very nice picture in the readers mind. It isn’t mundane or boring either, there’s a few language techniques and changes of tone or type and style too. A minor nitpick would be that while the sense of scale is conveyed, more time lingering on it would serve nice. At least in my opinion.
Overall, if this is for the long haul, it’s got promise.
Date: September 16 2022 1:54 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The Classroom
Very nice start. Keeping tabs on this one to see where it goes. It’s got the making of a very nice story.
Date: September 15 2022 10:44 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Classroom
Very well written. I’m definitely interested in where this goes.