Date: December 14 2013 8:49 PM Title: introducing the characters
Oh, and in regards to breast-feeding, when I first suggested it I didn't necessarily mean it had to involve lactation. I just thought Emma and Jane could want Kate to suckle their breasts just because they wanted to treat her like a baby because she's the size of one. It was intended more for fun and playing around than actually to feed her. Its just like the foot rubbing idea.
But as far as the lactation goes, even if Emma was never pregnant she could still be able to lactate if her nipples were stimulated enough by Kate's suckling. There's also drugs that could help the process along... if Lactation is supposed to help shrinkers like Kate then maybe Emma could get a prescription for one of these drugs to help induce lactation? If lactation helps the shrinkers and if the government has a program to help the shrinkers then maybe that's something you could have that agent discuss when he/she shows up? He/she could give Emma and Jane pamphlets on the subject, or something like that.
Author's Response:
I don't think simple nipple stimulation ould be enough for lactation to occur. I'm not a biologist but I'm pretty sure the body needs specific hormones for it to produce milk. these hormones are produced when a women gets pregnant but not from nipple stimulation. As for your last idea I think it's really good. I like the idea of Jane and Emma being handed pamphlets instructing them that breastfeeding helps while Kate just sits there with a stupified look on her face. I'm actually almost up to the foot rubbing chapter. I can't believe it is taking this long to get past the "character developement" pages and the "Emma interaction" pages.
Date: December 14 2013 8:23 PM Title: introducing the characters
I was reading through italykeke's suggestions and in regards to what he suggested about Jessica, please don't rush that through too quickly because I like her and she is a cool character so I would like to see her be able to stand up to Stacy and Amy for at least a little while longer. His idea is fine, but don't rush it too fast and just waste how you've built up such a cool character.
If you put in the Munchkin character and have Stacy start bullying him to speed up his shrinking it would be cool if Jessica sees the bullying happen and comes to rescue him. Of course this would piss off Stacy even more and help build things up for whenever she finally does manage to beat up Jessica... but don't let that be right away. Let Jessica knock her down a few pegs just a little while longer.
And if you want my idea for when Stacy finally does kick Jessica's ass, I think it would be cool if what happened is Jessica knocks Stacy down just like she always does, but this time around Amy sees this happening and she is tired of Jessica always winning and not shrinking so she decides to join in the fight and while Jessica is beating Stacy fair and square, Amy cheap shots her from behind, or maybe Amy's friend also joins in too and this is what overwhelms her...
So not only is Jessica facing people larger than her, but she's outnumbered by them and they are using cheap tactics so its not fair at all, but this is the only way they can beat her because she's just such a good fighter with her martial arts skills.
That's how I would like to see it done, but hopefully not too soon though, because I hope she'll be around awhile longer and be able to come to Munchkin's rescue at least once or twice to help build things up for the final finale.
Author's Response:
I wasn't planning on using his ending idea but was mostly focusing his Emma and mother interaction idea. I thought they were really cool. So don't worry, Jeescia will be around for a while and it will take quite a bit to take her down. Amy's "friend" Will also probably jin in on the action I just have to find a wy to reintroduce her and give her a respectable role. It might take a chapter or two before they make it back to school but when that happens shit will definietly go down between Stacy and Jessica. Also, I like that tautology you put at the end: "Final finale". Funny =)
Date: December 14 2013 12:30 AM Title: introducing the characters
Ha ha ok, hmm seems like I forgot to precise that it would be a nice payback if Stacey got the shrinking virus too at the end once Kate disappear (that's the most important thing but I forgot to write it ;( ).
According to breast feed of course Emma can't . And I don't know if you should make her be able to do it or not. if she cannot secrete milk she can still try to do it, and force Kate to suck like a baby at her breast. If she can it would of course be even better and more humiliating but you will have to justify it and I don't really see how to do it , maybe you could try "Suddenly, as Kate has stopped fighting back and sucked like a newborn on her big sister's breast she felt something weird happen, if she thought she couldn't be more humiliate, she felt an hot substance emerge from the young girl's breast.Emma was able to produce milk" . Or you could still make her suck the breast without milk production.she's drunk and heard about the advantages of breastfeed she would force Kate to do it even if it wouldn't work.
Date: December 13 2013 8:04 PM Title: introducing the characters
I think alternatives stories are a really good idea! It wasn't used too much on this website and I think it's a scheme there is not something like a choice decision possible. I really think this is a good idea and you should do it if you want to ! It can only be better!
As For my ideas, I'm glad to see you are interested in them !As you ask me for what I had in mind for a an ending here is what I thought of,the story should head to (it's a bad ending for Kate and friends I guess ) , Jess (and Michael if you choose to put him) are captured by Amy and Stacey, they use them to blackmail Kate and convince her to talk back to Emma and act as much as she can to make her mad at her and also clean their name to her. Then when Emma show no sympathy for Kate anymore ( serve her food on the ground, mock her in front of the family, put her back to her place , ignore her etc) and show more sympathy toward her other siblings the two young girls keep her and enslave her just like they did to the others. They treat her so bad ( with ass and feet treatment ) and surveil her so much she give up and beg for the freedom of her friends in exchange of her slavery. Of course the bargain wouldn't be respected and The two others, not ready to give up hope are bound to stay , for Mickael in Stacey's butt and for Jess in Amy's shoes. Kate would undergo both of their ass and feet for the rest of her life until she eventually become so small she disappear for them ( even sucked in a ass or pussy or even crushed underfoot or drown in sweat if she dies ) or she could also be placed when shrunk enough in Emma's or her mother shoes so she'll live in it eating fuzz and drinking sweat.
By the way I truly hope you'll make a scene with the mother, exhausted from work comes home , lie on the sofa and seing Kate not doing anything usefull force her to rub her feet , even yell on her when she refuses at first. As she sees Kate doesn't like to do it at all is amused by that and tease her again.If Emma tells her she shouldn't make her do that her mother could turn the table upside down and convince her daughter that Kate have to find a way to help in the house and if it's helping the hardworking ones to relax it's a good thing and she should encourage her to do more . She could say something like " common , it's even her who wanted to please me cause I had unfairly told her last time she didn't try to do anything useful, now she is willing to do that you want her to stop ? You disagree with her right Kate ?" ( this kind of behavior we will understand where Stacey got that comedian skills ha ha) . If she convince Emma to try it , that it will change her mind, the two of them would appreciate a nice movie while having their feet rubbed. I thing it could be a cool, rational way to have more physical humiliation from those two grown up ones. It will be another strong shock for Kate to handle , after being bossed around by her younger simbling, being talked to like a child and taken care of like a baby , she was now even under her once little sister's huge sole, massaging it while she wasn't even taking care of it and was more interested in the movie and joking with her mom witnessing how she was different and looked more confident and woman than before. I truly think it would be great, the fact they decide to do it any Thursday for exemple with her mother saying something like:" I hope it will be better next week cause you need to study foot massages" then Emma "Don't worry sis I'll buy you a book with any kind of massages so you will be the best tiny masseuse of the world", would make it common sence and if one day Kate decided to revolt and refuse then she would be scorn by her younger sister and punished after being forced to do it anyway . (Of course it wouldn't only be foot massages, it would be whatever you like and there is no need to write about it all the times she had to do that so this could be an event happening in one chapter)
Another thing I saw was breast feeding , it would be a really hard humiliation but it seems difficult to find any possible way it could happen, if you think about making one I only see a few way it could work , if you make a chapter were Kate has to stand against her too-drunk sister or mother. (there is another way: milk was found out to heavily slow down the shrinking desease)
Well I hope I inspired you a bit more, of course I detailed a lot the scenes but it's of course just to justify how the rest happened and try to be as clear as possible, then again take what you think is good !
Author's Response:
Thankyou once again for you suggestions, they have given me a lot to think about. I'm afraid I probably won't use your ending as I don't find that it would work but I would most likely make a variation of it as an alternative. But your other suggestion were very helpful.
I like how you expanded on your idea of the mother forcing kate for a foot rub and you gave me a few examples I could use to humiliate her and even bring Kate in on it. It would work well because then everyone in the house would be against her but in their own different way. This idea I will most definitely use. =)
The suggestion I like the most is your idea about breast feeding. I wasn't going to include it because it just didn't fit with the story but your ideas are brilliant. I could write about how the mother/ sister get drunk and combine that with the fact that breast milk slows down the shrinking process. This would give the drunken women the crazy idea that if they breast fed Kate then she would stop shrinking and would result in total humiliation for Kate. The only problem is that Emma shouldn't have the ability to lactate as she doesn't have a child. Breast milk developed when a womans body in subjected to hormones when she is pregnant and causes her to lactate. But I could just forget about that and make it happen anyway =)
All your ideas are good and I appreciate your input. If you have any other suggestions please don't feel like you'd be annoying if you gave them.
[Report This]Date: December 13 2013 5:43 PM Title: introducing the characters
Ah! I'm glad to see this amazing story back on road , with nonetheless that two new chapters I liked !
I'm glad you chose a way like this, I personally enjoyed how Emma seemed to like to have the "big Sister" role and even pshycologicaly humiliated Kate, it was a really good idea in my opinion.
As you asked to know what your readers wanted concerning Stacey I'm giving you my idea:I think that she should be less evil from now on, the psychotic character is pushed a bit too far and seems to be a bit unrealistic (this isn't a critisism, I really liked how she bullied around Kate but I think that with the harsh punishment she got, there is no way she would keep on harrassing Kate like she did before but maybe it only brought a big amount of hatred towards Kate but that's another thing ). I think it would be perfect to see her as a character with a strong personality of a dominant girl, enjoying to rule around and to have power on anyone, I would prefer to see her more as a power addict than a mere cruel person. The idea of having her classmate having the shrinking virus is really cool as mentioned in another review is really cool I think! Another scene that would be nice would be like she manage to be alone with Kate and says something like " you think you've won ? Well guess what I don't care about you! You're going to become less than dirt soon or later and at that moment I'll get you, and by the way I'm still able to play around with your stupid friend at school that's fun to see how she shrinks when she is worried about you " then spitting on her or doing her usual mean things .
I'm also giving you some ideas I thought of what could be cool to see.
To keep on writing about Amy and Jess, maybe you could make a scene where Amy manage for the first time to hurt Jess feelings by telling her how Kate had shrunk and make her shrink. Jess maybe could try to fight back Stacey while she bullies Michael but see that her shrinking was making her really weak and maybe even make her be defeated by Amy and Stacey.
For the mother's character I think it would be nice to see a gentle character but acting in a too often uncaring way. She would be gentle because thanks to this desease, she doesn't have to work as much as before but still not consider her daughter's shrinking desease seriously. Like she could humiliate Kate by focusing on how she wasn't even trying to do anything by herself anymore. referring to her as her "little baby "or to joke with her pointing out how she was the smallest girl she had. Scenes where she almost crush her saying her " ups sorry Kate I didn't see you you shouldn't stay around big persons when they are busy " well those kinds of stuff. I would really like to see her force Kate to give her a daily footrub because it's the least she could do for her hardworking mother ( she would argue ) Of course, Kate feeling like just a little foot massaging tool would shrink from both anger and humiliation from her uncaring mother. Maybe even having Amy ask for her mother to join and get one too ? Another scene including the mother should be she moves Kate to her room and set her in a baby-bed telling her it was better to have her around so she could help her even if she shrinks further and could go bring her anything she needed during night. A scene with the baby-sitter ? Kate being too puny to stay alone ?
The last two chapters showed really well how Emma has evolved while Kate has just kept getting smaller ( physically and mentally) I hope you will do more of that showing how Emma is now The big sister in this house and that Kate have to behave like a nice girl with her.
I have an idea for an ending too but I think I might have said enough stuffs and hope I didn't annoy you with my ideas. That's what I can think of would be cool to see. You are of course the one who decides and I will always enjoy your story ! Thanks for the hardwork and I'm looking forward to see more of that ! Thanks for reading
Author's Response:
thankyou for your ideas I found them quite inspiring. I especially thought the dialogue you supplied was useful and actually gave me some god ideas. In fact all the ideas you gave were excellent including the ideas with the mother. I was actually trying to think of a way the mother could act (As I do see her as a slightly uncaring figure since she has worked most of her daughters lives) and you gave some perfect examples. Here is what I will most likely use from you comments:
- Stacy's changed attitude
-Stacy's and Amy's attack on Jessica
-Jessica's realization she can't fight back
-Emma's "abuse" of Kate
-the mother's "abuse" of Kate.
You mentioned something about an ending you would like. I would very much like to hear it. I asked for suggestions so don't think I would ever get annoyed when I get them. All the suggestions I get are greatly appreciated (even the ones I don't plan on ever using). In fact, I was actually thinking of giving this story alternatve endings. For example, if kate shrinks too much and can't overcome an obstacle and dies I would write that as an alternative then write another chapter caying how she survived and continue the story. What do you think of this?
Anyway, thankyou very much for you ideas and I have taken them into planning. =)
Date: December 11 2013 7:56 PM Title: introducing the characters
Pretty good story heh, it's nice to see Kate catching a bit of a break with Emma there. It looks like she's starting to get treated like a younger member of the family. It would be cute to see how she interacts with Rebecca now, and even if Emma starts to treat her more like the youngest or like a toddler.
Keep up the good work!
Date: December 11 2013 11:46 AM Title: introducing the characters
In regards to the Michael Munchkin idea, take your time with it and stretch his shrinking out a bit like with Kate, but it doesn't need to be quite as slow as that. Show the ways that Stacy bullies him at school... she is already bigger than him to begin with and if its like in the other story then she has already been bullying him for years anyway, but now that he caught the shrinking disease that gives her even more of an reason to bully him than she had before. And don't just have her fart at him like in the other story. Have her really bully him and beat him up and things like that and take his lunch money and that sort of stuff like bullies really do.
As for the breast feeding, I agree there's no real practical reason to explain why it should happen, but I was thinking it could happen just because Emma wanted to do it out of maternal instinct. Since Kate is the size of a baby Emma might see her as one and want to baby her.
Date: November 10 2013 5:44 AM Title: introducing the characters
Since there seems to be a big discussion about this, I think I'll chip in too! The end of the latest chapter leaves an interesting opportunity I think for Stacy to show her manipulative side again. For example, she could put the blame on Amy, protesting that she just showed up when she heard noise like Emma did.
As for Emma, I think it's perfectly plausible that she be good. That also leaves the door open for interesting unaware interactions in the future.
Author's Response:
Stacy will always be manipulative and she will definately use that skill to try and get out of trouble =) Unaware stuff with emma has always been my idea i just have to wait for Stacy to get smaller.
Date: November 09 2013 8:26 PM Title: introducing the characters
Hi , I think even if there are some little misspelling the story is still really enjoyable and I liked every chapters you wrote .
As far as I'm concerned , I don't think that there is a urge to make Kate shrink at every chapters as she won't be able to grow back. Now she is only a foot and half tall there is not a lot to do until she is shrunk to a minuscule size. I think you should as mentioned in another review (I utterly agree with that one and the ideas developed in it) try to elaborate while she still have a "proper" height the relationship Kate will have with Emma as she is now fully aware of what happened. The idea of her bossing her around and yelling even punishing her sounded good as she may be in a really stressful situation at her young age and judging to the description you gave throughout the story. I think that Stacey should try to manipulate Emma and make her act roughly against Kate.
A thing I didn't see but I think may be important should be Stacey trying to act nice to clean her picture and try to get closer to Emma, like doing chores and advice stuffs Emma should have to relax. Stacey would points out how some persons in the house didn't do anything useful and didn't even tried to. Maybe thanks to that she would be able to convince Emma to act roughly against Kate and make her do stuffs she could do even at her size (degrading tasks of course like cleaning really filthy spots , changing Rebecca , or even convince Emma to get a massage from Kate)
I also sent you a mail and hope you got it ^^ , good luck and keep the good work , you're doing well !
Author's Response:
thankyou for your review and advice. with everyone mentioning how they would like emma to be mean through chores and degrading words sounds very appealing. I just have to workout how that can connect with my previous chapters and workout how emma will punish stacy and amy for what they have done. the story you mentioned sounds cool and i'll totally check it out. it will keep my mind off being sick for a while =)
once again, thanks for your review, i appreciate all your words of kindness and help.
[Report This]Date: September 29 2013 5:10 PM Title: introducing the characters
Really enjoying the story so far. Was wondering when she'd begin shrinking faster, and I'm looking forwards to finding out what they do to her when she's at a more manageable size.
Date: September 21 2013 1:57 PM Title: introducing the characters
I just want to say that I've read the story from beginning to end and there are things I like and things I don't like. But one thing that kinda disappoints me was something in one of the early chapters where you wrote that Stacy couldn't wait to "wail on" her older sister, but that never really happened and now with her being so small it is no longer possible for that to happen the way I had hoped it would.
The way I would have liked to see it is that when she had she shrunk down to Stacy's level somehow they both get in a fight and its a serious fight with fists and that sort of thing. But I'd have liked it to be an even fight. I don't like how you made it that Kate is incredibly weak even for whatever size she happens to be. Why not just let her be her normal strength in proportion to whatever size she is?
But maybe even with them both being equal in size and strength, you could say that with Stacy being a bully who has been in a lot of fights in school that she would win just by experience or something. Oh well though, what's done is done...
I will say I did like that Jessica was able to bring Stacy down flat on her face despite being smaller and weaker thanks to those jujitsu skills. I think it makes things better when the shrunken people are able to fight back to some extent and aren't completely helpless.
Author's Response:
well what is done can always be improved. because i don't know what people want specifically and because i am very new at this i easily predicted that there would be places in the story that people would want changed or improved. that is why i guessed i would have to go back and add chapters in between the chapters i have already made. if you want i can add a chapter or two in between the shrinking chapters to incorporate what you wanted. it would give the story more life and interest so i thankyou for your input. also, i just have to say that i love your stories so much. they truelly are amazing to read.
Date: September 12 2013 9:15 AM Title: introducing the characters
Hey. I've enjoyed aspects of the story so far, and I'm really looking forward to seeing the micro-nano-(subnano?) parts! Excited! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
thanks. i was getting tired with how slowly dhe was shrinking so i decided to just cut to the chase. in the next couple of chapters she should be a nicer size to write about.
[Report This]Date: September 05 2013 3:05 PM Title: introducing the characters
That last chapter was really great! I can see your writing coming along well, to the extent that I even like reading the chapters that don't have huge amounts of action.
You've really opened up loads of possibilities with this new chapter, and you manage to keep the suspense going with your gradual pacing. I like the new levels of depth the story is acquiring!
Date: August 28 2013 9:33 PM Title: introducing the characters
I have to agree with Bianca that Kate´s sisters are inapprehensible abusing her sisters virus infection. Did Kate repeatly hurting them physically before the story started or was mean in another way? I mean..do they realize they destroy the life of her sister? I wonder they never ever backstabbed Kate with a knife before the infection or pushed on the street at the busstob so that the bus makes short justice with her. They all really seem to hate her enough for that, if they willingly shrink their own sister down to microscope level planning to shove her up ther assholes..her sister.
But beside that..in would love to read some..planned unaware action by Emma..means..Amy or Stacy..put Kate in a position where Emma..hurts or humilitates Kate..unaware. With Emma being the oldest sister after Kate..i am sure..her size would really hurt if weight comes in effect XD
Date: August 27 2013 5:46 PM Title: introducing the characters
I love the butt stuff with Stacy x) Would like to see more of it. The thought of her being swallowed up into Stacys ass is pretty damn awesome..
Author's Response:
i do enjoy writing that sort of stuff but want to keep the story open for other fetishes as well so it isn't boring. that's why i made Amy into the foot person and Stacy into the butt person. you might be able to tell butt there is also another character who will join the group of evil and will emplore a different fetish. i wonder if you can guess the character. =) thankyou for your review and support, much appreciated. i will be uploading another chapter soon (probably mulpiple chapters in a row) but i have some university work to finish and that comes first =)
Date: August 27 2013 5:42 PM Title: introducing the characters
I think the story is very good and the alterations (e.g. removal of Rebecca's chapter) are positive. While Bianca does have some fair points about holes in the plot, I don't think it's crucial to the story progression and the disease was quite obviously just an tool to get the story going. Similarly, I don't find suspension of disbelief that difficult: the characters, even if intensely cruel, are consistent and self-consistency is the most important characteristic in suspense of disbelief. There are psychos in the real world: people who torture animals and abuse those weaker than them. Stacey was already pointed out as a bully earlier on (whereas it seems clear she had well-hidden the true extent of her sadistic cruelty from her sister), and Amy is easily manipulated and not fully comprehending. It's common for siblings to imitate their elders or be manipulated by them. I have certainly encountered many MUCH more erratic characters in such stories.
Emma doesn't have to be stupid to miss what is happening. Anyone who has ever been a child at school knows how bullying easily occurs under the noses of those in charge, and Stacey obviously has experience covering her tracks. Besides, you could always throw in a plot twist and have Emma actually being complicit in all the goings on, it's still open. Maybe they all actually grew to resent Kate when she was in charge.
I think the generally positive reviews on what can be considered a rather controversial scenario are indicative of a good talent for story-telling, even if it is a little bit rough around the edges, there is still plenty of potential and I hope you continue writing and improving.
As for ideas, have you considered a more subtle form of humiliation where they take Kate outside for whatever reason and she is treated like a child? She can be condescended to by asshole adults or not recognised by her friends. She has hardened herself against the abuse of her siblings, but it could have a negative psychological effect being treated as insignificant by completely benign people. Furthermore, being bullied by kids outdoors could cause fear if she is separated from her family - while her sisters are cruel, she still has the security and familiarity of her home, and Emma is usually not far. On the other hand, the fear of true danger could be greater outside. The anonymity of the abusers would also make it hit home how she is vulnerable to anyone and not just the cruelty she has already encountered.
It would be a good change of scenery I think: they could go to a pool, a playground, the beach where she gets buried to her head in the sand, a mall; there are plenty of options.
If you do want to develop the 'shrinking disease' plot further, then you could use that as another device for inducing fear in Kate. That is, she could watch a documentary in which they feature minute people in stricken, impoverished areas just being treated as disposable once small enough due to the difficulty of protecting them. They could be bought or sold or just abandoned completely to the mercy of nature and wandering people who want to entertain themselves. People could have competitions and games involving doing things to the tinies, and you could even have tinies abusing tinies.
Author's Response:
thankyou for your review. i appreciate that you can look over my rough spots as this is my first story. since i have gotten better at writing since i first started this story i have considered rewriting the first couple of chapters as well. i don't like how the shrinking disease is so rare and would prefer if it was just a "regular" disease. it would open up new ways of creating scenarios and help suspend disbelief. as for your suggestions i love them. i am already working on a chapter where kate has to go to school and will employ many of the tactics you have suggested. as for your suggestion of making her witness other shrinkies being tortured that ties in well with my wanting to rewrite the first couple of chapters. all in all, you have given me some new material to work with and should be uploading a couple of chapters within a day but i have to finish school work =) thankyou again
Date: August 26 2013 2:06 PM Title: introducing the characters
i have a few problems with this story. most of the characterrs are not really acting their age. those are some very smart little girls. too smart for their age. and the doctor? how could he simply forget about a rare disease that alters the lawsof physics and biology? that really made this a hard read for me. i understand kids can be cruel, but i didnt really see any overt cruelness from the main character that would warrent the cruel backlash. all i feel is pity for the main character and disbelief at the sisters. i cannot believe that the main character is that mind boggling dumb and the next older sisteer, i think emma, is just as dumb? then all of a sudden the next two are near geniuses? i can suspend disbelief, but not that much. and none of the sisters are afraid of catching the rare disease? the doctor has not called the cdc to say a rare disease that changes the laws of physics is now loose in the states? it seems to me like you are writing about someone you know and dont like, using the characters to get back at them. like i said, i can suspend disbleif, but not this much.... on a positive note, its a good premise. the characters are decently thought out, and your writing style is pretty good.
Author's Response:
as this is my first story i hope you can understand that everything isn't going to be perfect. i find it hard to create 4 different personalities and keep them on track with each other, especially after the long break i took. Stacy isn't really smart, she is just manipulative and all the problems she has faced haven't been that hard to overcome. Emma is often shown to be the new "mother" of the house as Kate is now ill and so i haven't really developed her. she isn't dumb, she is just easily tricked, afterall she is 15. the doctor was just a way for me to create the scenario and so didn't put anymore thought into it. if you want i will expand on the world and explain the shrinking disease more. comment on others who have got it and explain how it isn't contagious. also, any form of shrinking or growing (which is what this website is about) would go against more than just the laws of physics. there's biology, as well. Kate isn't stupid either, but has been severely mentally damaged through her trauma with her younger sisters. this causes her to restrict her actions out of fear of punishment. if you want i will give her more of a strong will so she would be able to fight bakc or out think her sisters ... hmm, yes that does actually sound nice. and lastly, no. this story isn't some way for me to "get back at" someone. this is simply a story.
[Report This]Date: April 02 2013 3:03 PM Title: introducing the characters
Update this story please
Date: March 16 2013 2:05 AM Title: introducing the characters
cant wait to see more. I love the cruelness of the family on her
Date: January 12 2013 4:37 PM Title: introducing the characters
hope this story continues but i do agree upon less chapters like the last one it tends to be disconcerting to see her like that