Date: August 08 2021 6:35 AM Title: In deep sh*t
Amazing hope to see more
I hope you make more lewd stuff with the daughter's younger ones
[Report This]Date: November 29 2014 11:10 AM Title: Inside Stacy's stomach
Pity that you seem to have stalled out with this one. I was hoping to find out what happened to Ear Guy someday. . . .
Author's Response: He met a scary ending. Or should I say ... Ear-y ending? 'Tis a pun.
[Report This]Date: January 20 2014 4:34 PM Title: In deep sh*t
This was another great and creative death. I love the evil poop dome. Maybe you could go fully evil chapter and do death by tampon or maxipad
Author's Response:
I don't think I would be doing a tampon death because I would have to say that that's just my limit. I would just not be able to get into a mindset to write about that. Also, I can't imagine these girls going to the pool while on their period and so wouldn't be using tampons.
Date: January 01 2014 8:55 PM Title: strange phenomenon
Can you get down and dirty and make a vaginal/pussy death? I think its time to finish up with all the nonsence and show us your dirty side. :D I love the story by the way. I'm a major book worm (lol) and I don't really mind all the grammar mistakes (who doesn't make them now and then?). But if you really want to do more with this hobby there is work to be done. Anyway, show us what you're really made of. :D
Author's Response:
Sorry to not respond sooner but I have not had internet for the past month. Thank you for your comment and have been considering more ways that I could write "dirty" as they are often the most fun. However I thought I had already shown you some of my "dirty side" with the previous chapter which involved scat. How much dirtier can you get than that? =)
Anyway, I shall be writing more chapters soon and will make sure I include some interesting events.
Date: December 11 2013 7:00 PM Title: In deep sh*t
Lucky Jasmine to get shit on by a middle aged goddess. The world is such a scary place when you're small, and Jane was nice enough to construct a house out of her shit for the poor girl to live in. It takes real skill to build a house for a person just through the act of shitting. Jane is a real goddess to be able to do something like that.
Too bad with a mere flush Jasmine was sent swirling into oblivion and wasn't really able to enjoy her new home that Jane kindly had built for her...
Author's Response:
Yep, it was a fully furnished house. Even had a little swing out back for her to play on =) It is kind of sad though, she will never be able to live teh rest of her life and died before she even finished her teen years.
Date: December 10 2013 5:47 AM Title: Grass stains
Please continue this story. I love the plot thus far
Date: November 10 2013 4:16 PM Title: strange phenomenon
I still think you should have some of the shrucken people be mistaken for ants and crushed under a bare skin butt of one of the women.
None the less this is one of the best unaware storys i have ever read.
[Report This]Date: October 28 2013 5:36 PM Title: Final Destination
do some feet deaths next.
Author's Response:
i will be doing a foot death but the next chapter is going to be toilet. there might be some feet death sprinkled in the chapters but you might have to wait a chapter or two until you get a whole chapter devoted to this death.
Date: October 27 2013 10:21 PM Title: strange phenomenon
Great job with the last chapters, I love the thought of being eaten and digested by an unaware little girl. From this point on, anything dealing with vore or butts gets my vote! Awesome work!
Author's Response:
my next chapter is actually going to be a toilet scene so i hope you enjoy
Date: October 27 2013 11:12 AM Title: Final Destination
I would love to see a bare skin butt crush, Like the 2 girls who are sun batheing find an ant hill (and shruken people) and challenge each other to see who can butt crush the most ants with bare Bums.
Date: October 27 2013 12:54 AM Title: Final Destination
I have a few questions.
1) Will you ever continue your other story, and if so when?
2) Are these characters based off people you know in real life? I'm just wondering since you use these same characters (or at least the same names anyway) in both of your stories.
3) I asked this question in a review on your other story, but you never answered. What exactly do these girls look like? You never seem to have elaborated on that. To many readers that would probably be a pointless detail, but I would like to know because it helps to visualize things more clearly.
And with those questions out of the way, I think I have a suggestion or two... you mention an ant invasion? Well, since you haven't done anything with Rebecca yet, how about this... kids that age like to pick stuff up off the ground and put it in their mouth, right? So how about she sees the ants which are attacking the tiny people, and she starts eating the ants. And since the tiny people are caught in the mix, they get grabbed up and eaten too? Then after this goes on for a bit perhaps the mom sees what's going on and she could respond in one of two ways. Either she thinks its cute and harmless since they are just ants, or she is concerned about germs and puts a stop to it by deliberately squishing them out. I would love to see the 40 year old mom deliberately squash out a crowd of ants under her bikini clad ass and not realize that some of them are actually tiny people..
Or, how about this... if she thinks her daughter eating the ants is cute she might want to record it, so what if she pulls out her phone to record it and let's say there is some drool coming out of Rebecca's mouth and the mother zooms in on that and notices there's a tiny woman in a bikini trapped in the drool... but that would obviously end the whole "unaware" aspect of the story, but it would then open up a lot of possibilities because then she could either save the tiny person, or watch as they either plummet to the ground or get swallowed down Rebecca's gullet to their demise...
Just a few ideas for you to consider.
Author's Response:
first: i don't want to remove the "unaware" aspect of this story because that is why i made it. this is where i put all my "unaware" ideas and if i changed that then i'd have to make a new story when i made another unaware idea and it would be a hassle. having said that, i think you Rebecca idea is really good and i'm going to think on that one for a while, thanks for the idea. right now she is just snoozing on the chair near kate so it might be nice to get her some action.
second: yeah i'll continue the other story but i don't know when. i have found that writing "unaware" stories are just easier because it has much less charater interation and more simple action. it is just easier to come up with the story and write it out and make it sound good. whenever i muster the will to write (i've found that writing actually takes a lot of mental energy) and continue a story i steer towards this story because it takes less mental energy. in other words i'm lazy. if you really want another chapter i could write one but it might take a little longer then it would take to write on of these chapters.
third: no, these characters are not based of anyone i know i real life. if i did that then i would be thinking about them when writing it and would creep myself out. i don't think i could ever write about someone i know in the way i write these stories. these characters are the same as teh one in my other story because, once again, i am lazy. i didn't want to come up with a bunch of new characters with different traits when i already have some. each character has a specific trait or role which i distinguish them by (being mean, cute, dominant, submissive, role model, lazy) i tell my characters a part by the traits i give them.
four: sorry, i didn't realize you had asked that on my other story or maybe i have forgotten about it. i don't know why i wouldn't have told you. their appearance go like this.
rebecca: short brown hair, round pudgy face, pudgy baby body. as she is a baby there aren't that many characterisics.
amy: medium height for her age. long black hair (lower back length). a light clear face with no visable defining marks. i imagine her with a happy smile.
Stacy: slgihtly taller for her age. neck length dark brown hair. a "strong face" (however you might picture that). i imagine her with a determined look.
emma: medium height for her age. long brown/ reddish hair (lower back length). she has a few freckles on her face which are a defining feature and a bright blue eyes. her look would be that of a person who is content with just helping people and doesn't like to take charge too much. whatever look that might be.
Kate: long black hair similar to Amy's. a strong face with a clear complection. she is slight taller for her height. her look is of a person who likes to take charge (probably because she grew up raising her sisters) but also fair.
jane- the mother: she has long black hair. tallish for her age and is slender for her age as well. her look is a mixture between confused and hurried. because she works so many jobs she is always flastered and that has developed into my mental appearance of her. that is why i imagine her to be the worried one of the group because she is always anxious about her work.
the family is white. each person is thin but not super skinny. breast size of those with them is modest. good size but now abnoxious size. they are a fit looking family who look quite healthy except the mother who is a bit stressed.
sorry if that isn't as much help as you wanted as i am not really good at describing features and simply relaying how i feel they look in my mind. if you have any questions simply ask. sorry ofr the super long response. i tend to over explain sometimes. if you truly want another chapter in TOASS then i'll try to get around to it.
[Report This]Date: October 26 2013 11:23 PM Title: Final Destination
Love these chapters. Maybe a toilet death?
Author's Response:
i like you idea. i have been considering doing such things but i also have to lead up to it. also, not everyone likes that stuff but i guaranteethere will be a chapter with that in it.
[Report This]Date: October 20 2013 1:59 PM Title: Inside Stacy's stomach
Im loving these chapters. Great work
[Report This]Date: October 18 2013 8:01 PM Title: Inside Stacy's stomach
I never would like one of them "go out the natural way" and survive, because that would be totally illogical and unrealistic, I am no fan of unrealistic scenarios (= Short passage into the small intestine is just a matter of minutes until they would dissolve, simple as that. They wouldnt make it longer than a few minutes at their size until getting turned into a lump of bones. I would like seeing more ironic twists too, some sarcastic writing style, adding lots of more humiliation. For example just after being pumped into the small intestine, it would "welcome" the two with its foulest presence, and John would be like "may... maybe I was wro...", and at that moment he would gag and vomit his own stomach content onto the small intestines "floor". Also it wouldnt be a passage at all, it would be a hell short trip :3
[Report This]Date: October 18 2013 5:39 PM Title: Inside Stacy's stomach
Hey :) Actually I didnt notice this story before, because the two first chapters were a little bit, well, hectic written for my part, lots of mistakes and yeah. But I thought giving it a 2nd try and this chapter went out really well, much better than I had expected. I am mostly into unaware shrinking and oral and anal vore, insertion, digestion, humiliation, irony and sarcastic writing style, "bad luck" evetns and charater death. I reall enjoyed the whole idea of them being swallowd and arrive in an emtpy stomach, just having some luquids left in it from earlier digestion. I always liked the idea of a plot where a swallowed characters wouldnt be digested by the stomach, but by the small intestine. So if I could wish for something to happen for the next part, this would be it. Most people dont know the small intestine actually is a much more digestive powerhouse than the stomach, because it doesnt digest by acid, but by enzymes and alkaline liquids. And it mist be a much more hellish experience than being "just" in a stomach. Maybe you could write it out that John somehow, because he doesnt know how digestion works, trys to give hope by telling they could have chances to go out the "natural" way and it would be some luck they weren digested by the stomach and now have chances of joining the small intestine, and the moment they would be pumped through the stomach exit, they would realize how wrong he is, because the moment they are on the other side, the stomach shuts tight again, the air would be thousand times worse than in the stomach, much more humid, maybe they would fell face down into the small intestine and would be like "maybe it wasnt such a good idea to go this wa..." and suddenly a wave of rush would send them much more way down the small intestine, no way of returning going back to the stomach exit. And small intestine digestion would kick in a few moments later, giving them the hellish experience of getting liqified while they are still fully conscious. A tip, you should never write a chapter in a browser window. Always write it in Word, Wordpad, or use Google Drive writing tool, where it would be always synced and saved. Then copy it over here.
Author's Response:
thanks for giving me another shot, i'm trying a new writing method. Your suggesstion is funny because that's kind of exactly what the next chapter is going to be. Although i am still trying to consider whether i should let one of them live to "go out the natural way" but writing that would be a little difficult. i actually knew the functions of the intestines when writing this and don't worry it won't be a pleasant passage. anyway, thankyou again for your feedback and suggestion it is much appreciated.
Date: October 18 2013 11:23 AM Title: strange phenomenon
Two adults eaten and digested by an unaware little girl at a pool, what a way to go xD
Great job, I love it!
[Report This]Date: October 17 2013 5:22 PM Title: strange phenomenon
This story has a lot of potential. I'd like to see more of kate and more AV in general. I have a feeling you have a lot more unique deaths so keep the creativity flowing!
Author's Response:
to let out a little spoiler i was actually writing a vore scene for that for my next chapter but i accidently deleted the Tab it was in. now i have to do it from scratch and my mind is refusing to give me the power to do it. losing a whole chapter is depressing.
Date: October 17 2013 8:23 AM Title: strange phenomenon
Digest themmmmm! <3
Author's Response:
=)
[Report This]Date: October 16 2013 11:44 AM Title: heat stroke
Hey, good to see that you're back! You've really cleaned up the formatting with your latest chapter which is great because I already liked your story-telling style so it's cool to see that you're fixing your weak spots and improving greatly.
You keep getting better and better so I can't wait for the next chapters in both your stories!
Author's Response:
thanks. i'm really glad you enjoy my story. yes, i had to clean up the grammar as i didn't realize that so many people found it annoying. i guess that's because i can read a story without caring about capitalization but these stories aren't meant for me =) i'm going to be writing more chapters on this story rather than "tales of a shrinking sister" because i find this story easier to write. i find it more enjoyable to write "unaware" content but i'm sure i'll get around to my other story later. =)
[Report This]Date: September 08 2013 2:54 AM Title: strange phenomenon
Well uhm yeah sorry if that sounded a bit rude, didnt mean to offend you. The story is still very nice to read and i look forward to read more about it :)
Author's Response:
don't worry. living in australia i don't take many things offensively and i did not think you were being rude either. i do hope that my message did not come across as me being angry or offeded, i was using more of an explanation tone rather than an angry one. i also often use smiley faces to try and show i am talking politely so people don't get confused with how i am speaking. i am very glad you like my story and you give me the want to write more.
oh, and by the way, you forgot the apostrophe in "didn't". =) hehe