Reviewer: tostitos Signed [Report This]
Date: September 09 2014 11:39 AM Title: Chapter 1

The tags brought me in and the premise is keeping me vested. There are many ways this can go and I'm interested to see where and how our protagonist takes her tale.

Smooth technique. You've set up a 'rival' with Crystal and a confidant with Amy. And you've built up a world for Nicole having had to work her way through difficulties. I'm eager to see what unfolds especially with Amy being that sort of friend. 

Hope to see more from you.

Reviewer: legio aurum corona Signed [Report This]
Date: July 02 2014 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 1

your writing style is fine. more than fine it is great. you describe your characters as people and i am sympathising with your character Nicoles Plight with her family. that happens too often doesn't it? any way i would like for it to continue