[Report This]Date: October 28 2014 4:00 PM Title: Just Killing Time
Her powers seem to be limitless! Transporting; shrinking to 'her' specific size; any number of chosen victims,...
Seems like, 'basically' anything could take place. You have the set up, now,... she's like a living, breathing, 'Goddess'.
I'd like to see what she would do with someone she's, 'attractived to', and although he's terrified of her, (and, not at all attracted to her) she still shrinks him, and captures him to keep for her little pet...
..... instead of just simply squashing him under her barefoot. ;`)
Author's Response:
I can draft that.
Oh, and by the by, there's a considerable bit more.
First, Isabel is a highly respected political figure. Most people will do whatever she asks, and even if they wouldn't, she could rephrase her request as an order and force it.
Second, the UMMD Mk 7 can change the size, location, and makeup of any object its owner pleases, provided specific enough orders.
Then there's the things she hasn't used yet . . . Kehehehehueha!
Date: October 27 2014 8:01 AM Title: Just Killing Time
Well, I don't really have any specific questions. Honestly, you have a person who seems to have supreme power of millions (or billions), but beyond the basic premise you laid out, I don't know much about it.
I have a similar premise in some of my stories, one woman having ulitmate power over much of humanity. So what I want to know is how yours differs, especially what drives the main character and what her ultimate goal is.
But I wouldn't want these things explained to me, I wouldn't want to see info dumps about the setting (or even explained in the reviews section), I'd rather read about it as the story progresses, filling the big picture little by little.
That's why I'm encouraging you to write a few more chapters in and get the story rolling, then that audience you're longing for will come naturally.
Personally, I'm a fan of violence in general when it comes to the fetish (which I'm seeing here), but I wouldn't want to impose on what the writer writes. Just mix in whatever you want as long as there's a hint of plot development.
[Report This]Date: October 26 2014 5:10 PM Title: Just Killing Time
Well, I would definitely want to know how you panned out the universe further. I think you should write a few chapters to get things rolling, then people will pitch in naturally. :)
Author's Response:
Well, any questions you may have are welcome- I really enjoy doing my explanations. Seeing as no one ever listens to one of my rants in its entirety in real life, it's nice to have what is essentially a captive audience.
Oh, if only it were that easy, mein freund. If only it were that easy.