Date: August 27 2008 12:34 AM Title: Teachers ASSistant
This was too much of an unreadable mess of words. It would be better to break up the paragraphs, just as everyone else suggested, but also give the writing an actual try. It was so much into the play-by-play that it was totally uninteresting. Try and use some imagination.
Date: July 26 2008 12:24 PM Title: Teachers ASSistant
Wow, I certainly enjoyed reading this. I wish it was longer though.
Date: July 22 2008 6:07 PM Title: Teachers ASSistant
I'm sorry, but you need to be much more patient when writing. This story in particular is an incoherent mess that has no logical train of thought and is just spouting off one idea after another. Use paragraphs. Go into detail about the events occurring in your story.
Date: July 22 2008 4:24 PM Title: Teachers ASSistant
Poorly written, at best. I wouldn't comment but you asked for reviews. Umm... try writing complete paragraphs instead of just a wall of text... and take your time, if you ever write another story.
Date: July 22 2008 2:47 AM Title: Teachers ASSistant
Paragraphs please.
The title earns a phail for the bad pun.
Date: July 22 2008 1:51 AM Title: Teachers ASSistant
this story wins simply by its name