Date: May 10 2021 3:35 PM Title: Work Ethic
This is absolutely fantastic work!
Really impressed with both the creative flair on display, as well as the willingness to allow suspense to build and payoff for certain events, such as with the vileness of Candis' red sneakers. Also, with just how readble and well-characterised the whole story is.
Just out of interest, do we have any idea how tall either of the sisters are, or possibly either of their shoe sizes? No worries if not, but I just thought it worth asking as I know that sort of information can add a little something extra for some people (like me).
Can't wait to see where things go from here, and all the best until then, man!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the kind words! I tried to make almost every character, both micro and human have at least some sort of background, even if they're only in the story for a short bit.
As for their heights, fortunate for you I based the sister off of some irl friends and for the most part, I know how tall they are and their shoe size. Candis is about 5'3 with size 7 and Jocelyn is about 4'11ish with her wearing a size 4. I hope that adds to the immersion of the story for you and I hope to see you in the future!
Date: May 10 2021 3:44 AM Title: Work Ethic
A very fun story. My kind of stuff. Keep up the good work
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far and I hope to see you in the future as the story continues :)
[Report This]Date: May 10 2021 3:42 AM Title: Work Ethic
O_O Kali is here......from "Taking the Bus"
Ok I was not expecting this.
Her appearance will make things interesting.
Tons of great content in this chapter, and this story as a whole and I am very interested in seeing where it goes.
This deserves more feedback and reviews (sorry for not reviewing sooner, haven't been too active her recently)
Keep up the great work!
Author's Response:
Adding Kali from TTB was an intresting choice for a number of reasons, some for the future of this story as well as some hints to possible future stories but for now, my lips are shut about her future in this story. For now, she's there to show a proper connect between TTB and it's Microverse counterparts and that it takes place around the time of TTB. Hope to see you around for the next few chapters!