Reviewer: InkPatch Signed [Report This]
Date: February 27 2015 11:58 AM Title: Chapter 1: Alice & The Locket

For an opening it could work very well, if it's possible to go back and correct the spelling mistakes.

Reviewer: FTV Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01 2012 11:59 AM Title: Chapter 1: Alice & The Locket

Definitly one of the best stories I've read on here. Also, I think the characters are more true to how people would be in real life than just about every other story on here.  Like the plot, like most of the situations, and I like that you tried to get just about every theme in there without having to start killing off characters.  I also like the fact that, even while there was some aspect of torture and some of the characters (mainly the sister) seemed to give in way too easily (and I think Alice was way to quick to begin abusing the other characters) Alice didn't turn into some sort of power obsessed dominatrix and everyone was more or less back to normal at the end. 

Author's Response:

Thanks for the decent and honest review. The thing I find is that there a LOT of cliches in this genre, most of which spoil and sexual shrinking fantasy for me. I try and either work with them or move around them if I can. I wrote it a long time ago and if I did it again then I think the sister would resist more, however Alice might have satyed the same ;)

Reviewer: Trisar Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21 2009 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 1: Alice & The Locket

Just finished reading this about a week back, only now had the time to leave a comment about it. In my opinion, one of the best, and sexiest, works on this site. The images evoked by your narrative left me able to perfectly picture everything as it was happening. An absolutely superb piece of work.