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Reviewer: supernatural Signed [Report This]
Date: November 30 2021 12:03 PM Title: Lynnisa’s a Big Girl

Ok not bad for your first go, id definitely suggest breaking it up though into paragraphs. It makes it a lot easier to read. Also a little more depth in the story goes a long way.

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