[Report This]Date: November 18 2011 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 4
The imagery and description in this is so well done, I seriously commend you for making an intelligent and well written story. The little details, imagery, description, use of all senses, humor, characterization... you've put effort into this, and it shows. You've turned a mundane car ride into an "experience" and that's truly what this genre can do.
Date: February 12 2011 2:26 AM Title: Chapter 4
The story feels incomplete. It was getting interesting aswell...
Author's Response:
It's fully my intention to pick it back up and add a few more chapters to it, at least. I hope I haven't chased everyone off with my procrastination.
Date: May 31 2009 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 4
I found this story a while back, and was sad to think it would be among those stories in our community that would never be finished. I'm estatic that you haven't forgotten about it.
I really enjoy the dynamic between Nick and Elise. Both of these characters are witty and interesting on their own, but together they are perfect for what you are trying to accomplish (almost like you designed them for that purpose or something). I particularly empathize with Elise. Unlike a lot of people with our fetish (Nick included, apparently), I also believe in true equality rather than feminism or submissiveness. It's refreshing to read about a character who represents my beliefs, especially when she is the one in control.
As for what you are trying to do with this story, it is a great and entertaining endeavor. Using the gentler aspects of the fetish to present what is likely as realistic a relationship between a tiny man and an average-sized woman as possible just drew me in from the start. It's also a great way to dissect the true value of said relationship before the shrinking, which is always fun to read. Your pacing serves your goal exceptionally well, too.
Your descriptions are spot on, and you've thrown in some interesting plot elements. Great job all around.
I hope to see a new addition to this story soon. You've left us on that last cliff hanger for a while, now.
Oh, and Johnny Dangerously is one of my favorite all time movies. I'll forgive you making fun of it this time, seeing as how this story is amazing and all, but don't let it happen again.
Author's Response:
I've never forgotten about this series, and I deeply regret having left it hanging for so very long. Whatever else I work on here, or elsewhere, I will continue to develop this story to its logical conclusion. Whatever that is. Thank you very much for your consideration.