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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 27 2012 8:44 AM Title: Daydreams and familiar faces

Maybe I'm being needlessly paranoid. But, Jack sounds, to me, like he's from the same mold as Andy. Slime mold!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 17 2009 4:25 PM Title: Daydreams and familiar faces

"No big deal." Yeah, right. And, GWB is a third-term POTUS.

Reviewer: angeloflife Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 17 2009 12:35 PM Title: Daydreams and familiar faces

So far am loveing this part 2 of the story, you give something for both sides. A small guy for the ones that love when the woman is the bigger one and then ones like my self that love it when the girl is small and the guy is the bigger one.

But i can't help but feel sorry for Bobby when he is small that Jen may take advantage of him or might do something that will hurt his feelings in some way.

Keep up the grate work, i very much look forward to reading more.

Reviewer: DrManhattan Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17 2009 11:20 AM Title: Daydreams and familiar faces

Starting the chapter in flashback was a nice touch, and the subject of said flashback was of great interest, too.  Parents are a big issue with both of them, seeing as how they both live with theirs respectively and all.  I thought it was kinda funny how Bobby's parents called Jen's to tell them of the arrangement.  I don't know; normally that level of meddling would seem annoying (realistic, but annoying nonetheless), but it just made me laugh a bit.

Sarah once again tries her hand at obtaining Bobby.  That's gotta get pretty tiresome for Jen after awhile, let alone Bobby.  I think someone has something of a fetish...

Seeing the story through Bobby's eyes inherently leaves a bad taste in my mouth when reading Jack, which is great for the story.  I thought he was pretty clever, the subtle way in which he reminded Jen of her previous relationship, trying to plant that seed of doubt.

You did a great job with the mannerisms in this chapter.  It was easy to tell how uneasy Jen was around Jack (with Bobby watching,anyway).  Jen's natural reaction to remembering the nervousness of meeting Bobby's parents, as well as gazing off into the sea at the though of adapting to being tiny were brilliant strokes, too.

This story is setting up pretty well.  I'm eager to see what you've got planned.

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