Date: May 26 2010 10:30 AM Title: Chapter 1: Dean
Loved the unaware aspect. It seems like that kind of story writing has dried up some. However it's good to see it come back with a delicious finish.
I would love to see more stories like this and I'm sure others would agree!
Date: May 25 2010 5:19 PM Title: Chapter 1: Dean
Thanks for sharing this story, and glad that you took your time and didn't rush with it. :)
I was hoping that Dean would have been stepped on by Samantha, but this way is probably more humiliating (and painful; stomach acid) for him.
Date: February 02 2010 9:50 AM Title: Chapter 1: Dean
Really enjoying this. I know this is a fetish work, but the reader in me still feels that the boys, though maybe a little arrogant, don't really deserve to be so punished simply for trying hard and succeeding. I'm secretly hoping for a just ending where at least Dean survives, but alas, they're probably going to get eaten, and teh story will be excellent anyway.
Simply excellent writing. Some of your descriptions, whilst imaginative, seemed a little dubious, but the narrative is well planned and the setting (if you can call a toe a setting) excellently portrayed.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! This story is more about injustice, especially when I consider the motives of the girl with the garnet ring. I agree with your criticism of descriptions, it is the reason I have been struggling lately with the story; I am never happy with them. Hopefully I will get better, and I hope you enjoy the conclusion that will be forthcoming.
Date: October 16 2009 5:13 PM Title: Chapter 5: Wild Ride
Nice addition! :)
One jackass down, three to go? lol
Author's Response: Your enthusiasm gives me enthusiasm! Thank you for the review and I hope you enjoy the rest of this story...hopefully I can get another chapter done in the next week.
Date: October 15 2009 10:28 AM Title: Chapter 5: Wild Ride
P.S.---no apology necessary. I have the same trouble, occasionally, myself.
As do some of my reviewers. ;-D
Author's Response: Thank you, for the understanding and the constant reviews. Helps the motivation when you know someone is out there actually enjoying what you put out.
Date: September 25 2009 10:21 AM Title: Chapter 4: A Change of Scenery
My bad! I just now remembered that BBL used it as a link between "Parallels One" and "Parallels Two." But, those were sf stories. Yours is a fantasy about poetic justice (a la THE TWILIGHT ZONE).
In other words, this tale is still first rate.