[Report This]Date: March 31 2023 9:58 PM Title: Wednesday Morning
I love this story! The unaware scenarios are written really well. I can’t wait to see what happens to poor Tim.
Author's Response: Thank you. Unaware scenarios are my favorite, so I really want to make sure they are detailed and well written.
Date: March 28 2023 10:04 PM Title: Wednesday Morning
Great
Author's Response: Great ‘good’, or great ‘sarcastic’?
[Report This]Date: March 28 2023 1:57 AM Title: Wednesday Morning
Mann... Poor Tim can't catch a break.
Author's Response: …And things certainly aren’t looking to get much better.
[Report This]Date: March 27 2023 4:44 PM Title: Wednesday Morning
It is good to see that Natalie is becoming more aware of incidents like this with Tim and Aunt Julia but not the full scope. The accident she has with him really helps Julia's case that there can be accidents. If there is constant accidents, there might be some worries that Aunt Julia is doing something. Aunt Julia will have to think of something to get Natalie back on her side. Either by blackmailing Tim with photos, or torturing him to be quiet. She can also fabricate photos of Tim in dangerous places and say that Tim keeps putting himself in those situations. A lot of different options of how Julia keeps getting away with it.
It is great to see a yoga scene where the tiny person is put into tight places on woman's body during a workout.
Author's Response:
So, one of the things that I addressed in my recent revisions was Natalie’s obliviousness towards what’s going on at home while she’s at work, along with Tim’s hesitancy to speak up about his mistreatment. I tried to address this and play up the blackmail aspect of the plot in this latest chapter, while still leaving Julia room to continue having her fun, but I also know that if I want to keep story somewhat believable, I will have to make some adjustments to the plot moving forward to ensure everything stays a secret. I think the torture route is the one I will ultimately take, but there’s also some gentle interactions in future chapters that I want to preserve as well, so I’ll have to make sure I get the right balance.
Ah, the whole “tiny stuck with a giantess while she works out” motif, another scenario I really don’t see enough of. I really like this kind of scenario, both aware and unaware. While “Babysitter Trouble” and “With Great Power…” really played up the unaware aspect of this motif, I really wanted to explore what a (somewhat) aware scenario would look like. I’m also proud that was able to link this back to Tim’s vision in Chapter 2; you know, trying to provide some foreshadowing…oh, and the workout’s not over yet! 😉
Thanks for the suggestions, and the review! Keep ‘em comin’!
[Report This]Date: March 27 2023 4:09 PM Title: Wednesday Morning
If I were Tim I'd definitely be playing up any potential injury or asphyxiation to scare/worry his aunt... at least temporarily. A little bit of payback and a short reprieve while she panics? Of course it'd probably end up backfiring and infuriating her. I'm sure she'd think up some creative punishment once his bluff is called.
Although I'm actually amazed he isn't covered in bruises or suffering from any broken bones/fractured ribs yet.
Even if Tim survives the week I don't know how Julia is going to keep getting away with it.
Author's Response:
So, one of the things that I addressed in my recent revisions was Natalie’s obliviousness towards what’s going on at home while she’s at work, along with Tim’s hesitancy to speak up about his mistreatment. I tried to address this in this latest chapter while still leaving Julia room to continue having her fun, but I also know that if I want the story to be somewhat believable, I will have to make some adjustments to the plot moving forward to keep everything a secret.
Your idea about feigning an injury to avoid further punishment does leave some room for exploration, however, and that might be something to consider.
Furthermore, I have eluded to Tim suffering some minor injuries, like feeling battered and bruised, but I usually like my shrinkies to be a little more resilient. I know it may not be completely believable, but I did partly justify this thought process in one of the review’s to my “Babysitter Trouble” novel. It also necessary for a Shrinkie to be stepped on and survive being stuck to a giant foot.
In any case, thanks for the critique; I appreciate the feedback!