[Report This]Date: April 25 2024 9:15 PM Title: The wish
I love this but disagree with the other review. You need to keep the Punishment where he can only survive on Delaney’s Footsweat and Toejam! In the future maybe Delaney doesn’t shrink him to help him have more food either, so he basically has to beg her to workout to get more toejam for him.
Delaney’s power over him can probably effect Alexis to the point where Delaney can prop her feet up on the table and he locks the sweat and sucks the toejam off her feet, but Alexis only sees Chase eating a normal meal. Like her perspective is Chase eating normally even tho he’s suffering trying to drink every drop of sweat and every small bit of toejam he can find to satiate his hunger!
[Report This]Date: April 25 2024 2:42 PM Title: New Diet
This chapter was good, though the idea that he can never eat anything but her toe jam forever seems like a lot to me. Like I don't know how he could keep that secret from Alexis. Maybe it's just for this day (and any other days she decides to do it).
I'm glad you like the popcorn idea. I think it would be fun to have Alexis and Delaney sharing the popcorn so they both get a chance to eat him. Maybe she magically makes him unnoticeable to Alexis, or maybe instead of popcorn it's gummy bears or something and she makes him colored like one so it's not noticeable. He could be eaten dozens of times in the course of a movie.
Her doing something casually while he's suffering is good. That's perfect for the casual eating above. Other ideas in that vein:
- I still think him sort of becoming a toe could be fun, where she goes about a normal day while he is trapped in her socks and slippers and shoes, ground against the floor or her insole, etc.
- Maybe when she brushes her teeth he ends up attached to the head of her tooth brush and scrubbed across her teeth? Or he could end up very small and tied up in a knot in a string of floss and dragged back and forth between her teeth.
- Maybe Delaney complains about a seat being uncomfortable, decides to sit on him instead. At first maybe he's laying on the couch and she just sits on him, but then she makes him small and uses him as a cushion.
- He could end up as a tiny speck on her deodorant, get applied to her armpit, then be stuck there during a run.
- Maybe as just a random scene, Chase is busy doing something, then suddenly he's tiny in Delaney's hand. She says something about her foot was itchy, uses him to casually scratch her foot, dragging his face across her sole to scratch it, then he just pops back to where he was originally. I like the idea of her being willing to use him for something so quick and insignificant so he can never be secure at any moment of his life
[Report This]Date: April 24 2024 2:57 PM Title: The wish
Another great concept! This god like powers thing could be fun. Some ideas:
- Delaney is sitting on the couch watching a movie, maybe with Alexis. They have a bowl of popcorn, and Delaney makes tiny Chase appear in it, get scooped up in her hand, chewed and eaten, and then he just appears again and again, eaten repeatedly.
- Delaney turns Chase into a tattoo somewhere on her body. Imagine her having him tattooed on her sole, on her under boob, her armpit, her butt cheek, etc. as she goes about her day or exercises.
- Kind of a weird one, but what if Delaney turns Chase into her toe? Like, she snaps her fingers and suddenly he is tiny sized, with his legs gone, and his torso is just sort of growing out of Delaney's foot in place of her toe. He still has his arms and upper body and head, but he is attached to her foot, his face is slammed into the ground whenever she takes a step, etc.
Reply to this and let me know if you like any of these ideas, happy to discuss ideas over email as well.
Author's Response:
I love the popcorn idea, i am obsessed with ideas that she can be nonchalant and casually doing something but be torturing him the whole time