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Reviewer: Asukafan2001 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 13 2010 10:36 PM Title: The Start

i'd work on paragraphs, seperate out dialogue. Each new thought needs a new paragraph. Your story, while it looks like it has promise is kind of hard to read in its current format

Author's Response: OKAY

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