Date: March 06 2013 2:30 PM Title: Jaclynn Plays - Chapter 1
Just stumbled upon this, and not really sure why I didn't take a closer look at it during the last update a while back. It's quite a bit of fun. As a previous reviewer said, you have a very to-the-point style but you do a nice job still of bringing in the more impactful elements that give individual moments their weight. There's a handful of technical errors but I only noticed them because I'm something of a grammar nazi, so they're certainly not distracting. I actually liked the daring of your two-parter chapter between Jaclynn and the little boy. While it may offend some, I personally had no difficulty with it, being that when I read a story like this I often project myself mentally onto whatever shrunken male character is being toyed with, so it didn't feel so much like an issue; I particularly enjoyed the gentle interaction she had with him in the first half. Anyway, good work. It would be cool to see this return sometime.
Author's Response: Thanks jacksmith, that means a lot coming from you; your stories are excellent and very well received in our small, strange community. I agree completely on the grammar...I don't review and edit nearly as much as I should, and it has been 6 yrs since a college english class. On Jacylnn and the little boy: if ppl get offended and stop reading that's up to them. The little boys fate is not good if I ever start typing again.
Date: September 21 2012 7:17 AM Title: Jaclynn Plays - Chapter 1
Nice to see another addition to this story. Looking forward to more new chapters. :-)
Author's Response:
Thanks Cke, i'm glad to be back
Author's Response:
Thanks Cke, i'm glad to be back
Date: May 20 2011 2:33 PM Title: Jaclynn Plays - Chapter 1
I love this story. But i´m wondering... is it too late to request a chapter - more like a deleted scene - about Tommys first day in her panties or something similar?
Author's Response:
possibly. i ve been busy lately.
Date: September 18 2010 12:55 AM Title: Jaclynn Plays - Chapter 1
After reading the full story (which can never finish, I guess !), I want to congratulate you. It was very fun, and one of the best I read. There's only one thing i could miss in your stories: digestion scenes. But that's personnal, so if you don't like to write it, I'm very OK with that !!!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! There may be some digestion scenes in later chapters, I'm just not sure yet.
Date: August 28 2010 12:00 PM Title: Jaclynn Plays - Chapter 1
Glad to see the story is back!
Date: July 15 2010 3:46 AM Title: Jaclynn Plays - Chapter 1
Thank you, Parrot, for your response. I should like to say that - when I mentioned "...include the daughter" I meant that the daughter be active with the tiny victims, not any actions between mother and daughter...if you get my drift. Good yarn.
Author's Response: Read you loud and clean Banfield. I'll take your advice into consideration; you're a good writer and have some great stories on this website. It may have a weird feel to it if the daughter and mother shared such experiences... I'll try and hold off on such a scene until I hear that people are actually interested in that. One thing that fascinates me about this site and story is that there have been more reads than actual words in the story! Thanks for the response.
Date: July 14 2010 8:32 AM Title: Jaclynn Plays - Chapter 1
Please take no notice of "timescriber's" remark about 'insertions. It's one of the best scenarios in such stories, and you have done that.
I sincerely hope you will be writing a further chapter AND include the daughter!
Author's Response: Thanks Banfield. I plan to write another chapter soon, and definitely plan to include a mother-daughter scenario sometime in the future.
Date: June 30 2010 6:09 PM Title: Jaclynn Plays - Chapter 1
I like the use of the moans from within his destination. It would be interesting to have a prequel explaining how he got into this predicament.
The mother/daughter combination leaves many options open. You could really take this story anywhere. I hope there'll be more.
You describe female reactions to the whole thing so well, it's hard to guess whether you're a male or female writer.
Author's Response: Thanks Timescribe! There will be more when I have time - it's just tough to decide on whether to keep this story soft vore/hard vore themed. I'm leaning towards the former as of now.
[Report This]Date: March 18 2010 9:23 AM Title: Jaclynn Plays - Chapter 1
I like the story - a little short, but good
Author's Response: Thanks Gatsby!