[Report This]Date: February 19 2011 9:24 AM Title: Chapter 10
Cool chapter. Starting to understand these two. Hope to see more stellar chapters.
Aaron
[Report This]Date: February 10 2011 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 9
Was just thinking about this story the other day. Lol.
Really glad to see it back. I love these characters immensely. Well done.
Hope to see more.
Aaron
Date: April 08 2010 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
You may want to watch your sentence structures. Not breaking the mold of SUBJECT verbed the OBJECT can lead to very boring narrative. For instance, in chapters 2,3,4,5 and 6 there is only one paragraph taht doesn't use the word 'Nickolas' in the first line. This makes it different to pace your story in an engaging or interesting way and can make it seem flat.
I hope you don't feel like i'm being unfair, but constructive criticism never hurt anyone who acted upon it
Date: April 08 2010 4:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
Thanks for the good reviews everyone, I’ve had a lot of time to write lately so hopefully I’ll be able to add at least a chapter every day for some time.
[Report This]Date: April 08 2010 10:17 AM Title: Chapter 6
This is turning out to he a really fantastic story, love the chemistry between Ann and Nicholas. Also your chapters are well put together and easy to read. Loved the cliffhanger at the end of this chapter, can't wait to see what happens next.
Aaron
[Report This]Date: April 08 2010 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 6
A very great and fun story, i look forward to reading more.
Date: April 06 2010 3:29 PM Title: Chapter 3
Wow, this looks like it will be a great story! Can't wait for more!