[Report This]Date: May 04 2010 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 1
You inspired me to write stories when I read yours when you used the name Black Jack, I thought it might be you by the style and am glad you are back! Thank you for this story!
[Report This]Date: May 03 2010 4:27 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is a great story and really showcases your skills at writing tense, foot-related scenes, where the woman is unknowingly about to crush someone she cares about. From this and your other story, I think it's a safe assumption to state that you're more of a fan of the woman infliciting pugent acts of humiliation unknowingly. However, I liked your dream scene that demonstrated the guy's fantasy of being his mom's tiny foot lint. As I've commented many a time on stories such as these, I hope the mother really does discover her son at her feet, and winds up torturing and purposely smushing him. That said, you're an awesom writer and whatever you do will be fun to read!
Author's Response: Thanks for the comments. I like to create stories that are a little more off-beat--I mean, obviously everyone here is attracted to women and their feet, and so making something more "desperate" helps, for me, to create something more original. Anywho, I'll do my best to actually finish this story. Thanks for the comments!
Date: May 03 2010 3:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is great. Please continue with another chapter!
[Report This]Date: May 02 2010 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 1
hope that the mom does find him in the next chapter, but would little bit of cum even be noticed by her? well im definitely waiting to find out.
for some reason i like this story...
eventhough im not a big fan of incest, the foot scenes are very well written.
aaron
[Report This]Date: May 02 2010 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 1
It's good, but you cannot for a second claim to have produced a 'quick moving story' when your main character has spent seven chapters laying in one spot.
Author's Response: Well, Sandwich, I guess that depends on your definition of "quick moving." I wasn't suggesting my character was going to be running alongside a train--I simply intended to spend more time on "things happening" and less time on inner monologue and character development. But, thanks for the comment nonetheless.
[Report This]Date: May 02 2010 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
i like where this is going. please continue..
Author's Response: Wow! Quick response. Thanks!