[Report This]Date: April 01 2011 11:19 AM Title: Rebel
Oh, yeah! I'm definitely tuning in for chapter 3.
:-D
Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying it so far. :)
I'm not worried about George Lucas' Disease with this story. My main concern is that readers don't find it too preachy about the faults of human kind. I conceived the story after playing the video game Shin Megami Tensei: Strange Journey, which is also very preachy about humanity and has a Mother figure as the final boss of the Neutral and Law routes.
[Report This]Date: March 28 2011 12:50 PM Title: Rebel
This story is brilliant, I really enjoyed it, and can't wait for more! Merle is one awesome warrior giantess (hope she doesn't die though, but that's just me =)
[Report This]Date: March 28 2011 8:56 AM Title: Rebel
what an astonishing chapter. an thank you for continuing this remarkable tale.
really love where its going an like the fact that maria was taken by kharla's chamber. cant wait to see what happens next.
aaron
ps loved the scene where kharla is watching with amusement as two humans fight by her bare feet,
Date: March 28 2011 12:37 AM Title: Rebel
It's ok but then the name Eli appeared from nowhere and it gets very confusing for me as a reader. There is no mention of this person previously. Perhaps if oyu describe her first and then only call her Eli after he name is mentioned for the first time by another character...
Author's Response:
It seemed that Elli's name came from nowhere because that scene was from her point of view. So obviously she would know her own name, and not have to describe herself.