Well, Amanda, you ought to continue regardless of your faults of grammar. It's intriguing. I found it good that the "predator" was so young, but then, in the 2nd part, she's suddenly much older. Never mind, as gentle though it be, it's definitely worth reading, and it's different.   BTW: I presume you don't wish to see the changes/additions I have made to your previous yarn - "Apple for the Teacher."   Ho-hum...