[Report This]Date: May 21 2011 11:58 PM Title: Chapter 11: Inconvenient Surrealism
Wow what a chapter. I loved it. The double teaming in the dream was awesome.
Author's Response:
I just couldn't resist bringing Jenny back for one last visit
[Report This]Date: May 21 2011 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 11: Inconvenient Surrealism
One really smart thing you've done is write most the story before posting sections of it in separate chunks. I can't say how many authors (me included) have started a story, only to burn out after a few chapters or so. You're lucky these stories have flown so well!
I apprciate you not taking offense to my emphasis on the foot stuff, particularly the smell aspect of it. It's my favorite aspect of this fetish, but excellent writing like yours, makes any size-related domination exciting and fun to read! Now, that said, from some of your characterizations and scenes seem to indicate that Carly's feet pose a deep sense of dreadful aprehension for her brother. She also seems to realize this. Stories like this inspire me to try and finish some of my own tales, currently laying about, collecting dust!
Author's Response:
hey, it's all good, they're your opinions. i certainly can appreciate the foot stuff, perhaps not at the level of depth that you do, but I have enjoyed including a lot of that kind of stuff in the stories to make a cohesive whole with all of it
[Report This]Date: May 21 2011 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 11: Inconvenient Surrealism
I appreciate your consistent chapters. You've got great discipline to shoot new stuff out consistently! I really liked this latest chapter (11), as it's showing how emotionally wrecked he is. I also believe you're near a final conclusion and can honestly say, I have no idea of what will happen!
It seems as though you've probably got a conclusion sorted out at this point, but if you're looking for suggestions, mine is that Carly finish him off in some fashion. While it looks like he's a goner by way of her teeth an/or digestive tract, I'd obviously love to see him forced to endure her feet like in the first part of the first story. Perhaps even have the hellishly pungent stink force him to ejaculate against his will, only to have Carly slowly, agonizingly, and cruely, smush him as she painfully scrunches her toes over him. Now, predicable I may be, but it's just my two cents. You've done a superb job and you should be truly proud of your effort!
Author's Response:
i have got the weirdest working brain; when i try to think of a story, i either get zilch or i get a massive load of random ideas to use. as the latter has been happening in the last week or so, i was able to just toss the chapters out like hotcakes. you are correct, i actually do have a conclusion written out as i write these in quick little spurts of a few chapters at a time, and while your idea is a bit different from how it ends, i think you'll still be pleased with some of the content the end contains