[Report This]Date: September 17 2011 3:58 PM Title: Lenora
Thanks for the shout-out. I like most of what you've got here. Honestly, I'm not much of one for stories that leap directly for the throat on the sex scenes, which is certainly what you did, but you write them well enough that I didn't find myself minding it so much. Your story/sex scene switch-off style among the chapters seems a bit risky, as this can potentially limit what you can pull off narratively, but I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and see where you can take it. I like the awkwardness you seem to be generating between Lenora and your tiny protagonist, which I assume is going to have some kind of pay-off whenever the two of them end up in some steamy fetishistic scene. Again, I urge you to not feel the need to pile on layer after liquid layer of lesbian sex; you can very easily create tantalizing scenarios without having these constantly. Keep it up!
Author's Response: It's great to hear from an author I admire immensely. I was in fact planning to tone down the sex for the next few chapters, just to develop the characters more before the story's climax. I'm really glad you're enjoying it, since I was rather wary of how my first story would turn out. Again, thanks for the feedback.
Date: September 12 2011 2:17 PM Title: Lenora
Hey it's me again.... great chapter once again! The idea of having plot development end sexual scenes following each other in chapters is brilliant! I wish it was the case in many boring stories i had to filter to get the good parts! Your plot though is still very enjoyable, i like the closeness and playfulness of the 2 friends! :) I hope this idea of alternating between plot development and more fetish-like chapters won't force you or make the flow of the story unnatural... You can handle it though, i am sure! Keep up the good work! :D
Author's Response: Thanks again! It's always nice to hear that you're doing something right.
Date: September 11 2011 5:36 AM Title: Lenora
I kinda liked the "abrupt" as it was mentioned before, second chapter, cause, i am close to their age and i can relate myself to them...if your best friend admits he/she likes you, and you are lying on the bed, it would most probably develop as you did in that chapter.... i also liked the playfulness of the whole thing, and i suggest you keep it up in the next chapters.... Finally, i would like it if you included lots of feet-play too, not only dominant ( as i see it coming from the blonde) but maybe also playful from her friend :)
All in all, i enjoyed it a lot till now, and it's deffinitely one of the stories i am following.... Keep up the good work! :)
Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, feet is in the categories list, so I will be adding that in there at some point.
[Report This]Date: September 10 2011 10:38 PM Title: Lenora
I just had to add my support to this story so hopefully it will grow as good SW stories seem to fall by the wayside here sometimes.
All the best and looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks! I agree about the SW discrepancy on here, and that's part of the reason I wrote this. I tried to make it the story I always wished I could read, so I'm glad you're liking it as well.