Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: September 11 2011 2:53 AM Title: Bedtime with Jenna

I love the sub-genre of naturally tiny people in a normal-sized world so I am definitely intrigued. Having a female lead character makes this stand out from most other stories of this type.

I think you kind of rushed things on the second chapter though. Sure, we all want to see the ladies hook up but it was very abrupt. "You're gay too? OMG, come here so I can screw your brains out!" It seemed a little forced. Getting to know them as characters first would make it more meangingful when they get together.

Author's Response: I entirely agree with you. I did realize how gratuitous it was, but I guess it could be explained with the (admittedly extremely thin) framing device that Jenna had always secretly wanted to do this, and now is her chance. Don't worry, the rest of the story won't be entirely lesbian SW sex scenes. That chapter was mostly to test my skills at actually writing one. :D