Date: November 18 2011 6:38 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
dude (or chick), you have a seriously good story here, I just started and i'm already hooked, I'm not the best author on here, not by far, but I definetely know that this story is gonna turn out great!
[Report This]Date: November 13 2011 6:38 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
I would've liked a little more attention to Jim's experience, slipping from the glass into Julia's mouth. It went kind of quick!
Author's Response:
i think you entirely missed the point of jim; he was meant to give a crash course in what julia was willing to do, the main and important characters are the ones being focused on now
Date: November 13 2011 7:42 AM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
This was one of your finest chapters.
The Bratiness came through beautifully as the did the humiliation of the task. Well done.
[Report This]Date: November 12 2011 9:32 AM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
Good story, I liked the vore scene. I think it would be interesting to know how Julia got the shrink-ray. Do they live in a time when that technology is available, or is there some other explanation?
Author's Response:
it's a time where the tech is available, although expensive (which julia can handle b/c her parents are rich). this probably raises the question of "well, wouldn't this kind of thing happen a lot more often, then?" to which i would answer, don't think about it too hard ;)
Date: November 10 2011 3:37 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
I have to say this is an excellent stop over while waiting for the escapes of Carly and hopefully down the line Alison...
I enjoy the fact you added the bit of realism with the pregnancy as taboo as it is in a fetish format it adds a bit more sympathy to the two characters directly involved especially Brian.
Excellent work.
Author's Response:
thanks! i felt like it would be an interesting risk to take to toss in that part of the story. carly will return soon. alison i'm not so sure about; i'm not sure if there's a ton of interest there for people
[Report This]Date: November 08 2011 11:55 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
I really like how you portray the captives' interactions with Julia, and the way you can see them getting used to their situation. It seems like Julia cares about them even if in a screwed up way.
Once again you do a great job conveying tension and portraying the psychological aspects of some messed up scenarios. I like it!
Author's Response:
thanks, i love the psych stuff, it makes it so much more fun
Date: November 08 2011 5:49 AM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
Wow, you're one of only two authors on this site that make me feel true genuine emotion when I read. That whole detention chapter was very nerve wracking for me, as I wasn't sure what she was going to do. You really have a knack for flushing out your characters in a way that makes me very attached to them. Amazing work as always. Keep it up! And my other favorite story of yours is The Freshman! Hope to see more of that as well!
Author's Response:
thanks, i'm glad you're enjoying it that much. the freshman will come back eventually as well
[Report This]Date: November 05 2011 8:00 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
awesome story. kept me at the edge of my seat.
aaron
ps i take it that this is complete then?
Author's Response:
no, i've got more that i will post soon
Date: November 05 2011 5:07 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
moar!!! your one of my favorite authors cant wait for the next chapter
[Report This]Date: November 05 2011 2:45 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
Always good to see somethign new (well, something we havent read) from you. I will say that I'm a little disappointed though, it sounds like you dont plan on doing much with this, which is unfortunate, but regardless, it's the start of something very cool.
Author's Response:
there's actually a lot more to this story, i just need to spellcheck it, but i'll post it eventually. thanks for reading bud