Date: July 24 2012 10:40 PM Title: Chapter 1: We Start With The Middle
Are you continuing???
[Report This]Date: November 08 2011 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 1: We Start With The Middle
A decent start. I particularly liked the first chapter. You have good vocabulary and description. You need to watch your spelling and seperate your paragraphs though- in the second chapter. It seems arbitrary, but trust me, it makes for a much more readable story. Keep at it.
[Report This]Date: November 07 2011 11:52 PM Title: Chapter 1: We Start With The Middle
great start. hope to see more.
cant wait to see how the step mom shrunk him and why.
aaron
Author's Response:
Thank you i at the moment i am working on how he got shrunk and and carefully sorting out how i will develop the plot futher.
Date: November 07 2011 3:39 PM Title: Chapter 1: We Start With The Middle
I must say, in terms of spelling and grammar this is a vast improvement over your other story. The story itself is a good start as well. You are heading in the right direction.
BTW, why did you delete the other story?
Author's Response:
i deleted the other story because it was only a test run just to see how people would respond really,just untill i was going to post this story. Also thanks for the complement on the storie so far i am going to be carefully reviewing my chapters before adding any other ones. PS: the first chapter on how he willl get shurnk may take some time as i not going to rush that part nor am i figured out what exactly is the best was of shrinking him.
[Report This]Date: November 07 2011 1:54 PM Title: Chapter 1: We Start With The Middle
A good start,i really enjoy the way you use the words and how you use them.I can't wait to hear more from this story,keep at it and you'll go far!
Author's Response:
Thank you i am putting much thought into this story as i go along.