Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: November 14 2011 10:00 AM Title: Chapter 3 - With More Denial comes More Punishment

Here: The woman starting grinning.

I think you mean started.

This chapter was good but I still felt it needed more description. Towards the end was better and I really like the twist you added in with Marvin suddenly taking his sword out. I also did not expect her to have his family with her so that was an interesting addtion.