[Report This]Date: October 17 2012 10:14 PM Title: Chapter 2: The Exhibition
I like the concept of miniture cities along with tiny people on display.
Date: September 17 2012 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 3: Conclusion
For once, women are a power to be reckoned.
Date: July 27 2012 5:42 AM Title: Chapter 1: Heading Down and Arrival
Any chance of a third chapter soon? Would be a shame to leave this story unfinished.
Date: March 05 2012 3:51 AM Title: Chapter 1: Heading Down and Arrival
Many thanks for your reply, Doorknob. So glad my comments did not disparage. Of course, the fantasy of being devoured by a female (or several) is so exciting whichever one desires - whether shrunk or full-sized. Both situations galvanises the libido - especially the frightful anticipation beforehand - that of awaiting one's gastronomic fate, and then that fearful moment upon being introduced to the beautiful mouth of the female predator. Weird, yes, but so sexually stimulating. Look forward to your next instalment, my friend.
[Report This]Date: March 04 2012 6:12 AM Title: Chapter 1: Heading Down and Arrival
Great writing as usual, Doorknob. You really know how to keep things interesting. I like how the story takes a little turn with the Exhibition and the introduction of Rian. I did however miss some vore action, but i guess that's for part III.
It would be a shame if the next part became the final chapter. I really like the character of Brooke and i would love to see her go on more vore adventures. Maybe she can consume her next man together with some friends. her next victim can be some a little more innocent than the man she captured in part II. Just a suggestion. I like the idea of Brooke being merciless to a totally helpless and innocent man. Anyway, great work!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the input! Part 3 will have vore for sure. I was thinking of ending this chapter with vore but didn't want to rush it in at the end.
Date: March 03 2012 7:42 AM Title: Chapter 3: Conclusion
Wel, doorknob, I found this 3-part yarn extremely interesting and well-written. Could not fault it except that it doesn't really excite one. I would have put more detail in the description of the female characters - the three girls and the staff of the Exhibition. As well, I always find it hard to accept the minimised victims at only one inch. Such a morsal could hardly be felt by the diner as it descends down her gullet, let alone "fill" her stomach. However, as you have said, and I, 'everyone to their own.' Don't let my remarks discourage you. In time, perhaps you'll improve and take heed of what I say.
Author's Response:
Absolutely banfield, glad to hear from you. There was so much more I wanted to add but I started to feel like I was going in circles so I cut some stuff out. I'll try to bring in some of it in during the next chapter, specifically in describing Brooke's features.
[Report This]Date: February 27 2012 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 1: Heading Down and Arrival
Fantastic writing a great detail. Doorknob you do a great job of painting the picture for a reader and what a picture it is! Well done. I look forward to more!
Author's Response:
Glad you enjoyed the story girlfood! It's probably my favourite addition so far, hopefully I can get the next (probably final) chapter up soon.