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Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 23 2012 12:58 AM Title: Chapter 4: Death March

Well I just read the 4 chapters in one sitting. I'm not really a fan of the micro genre. But I like all your other stories. So I gave it a shot. It's very good.

Dave



Author's Response:

thanks for giving it a shot, glad you like it

Reviewer: exiguus Signed [Report This]
Date: April 21 2012 6:33 AM Title: Chapter 4: Death March

I love it.  You have done a fantastic job with the description of the mother.  

(On a side note, I think you meant 'horizontal' instead of 'vertical' in par. 9.)



Author's Response:

ah, good catch. thanks

Reviewer: deviant Signed [Report This]
Date: April 21 2012 2:09 AM Title: Chapter 4: Death March

Nice a new Jack Smith piece :)

While the writing is quite good I have to say, sofar I keep hoping little Alex is discovered.  Michelle sounds like one delicious MILF.  Judging from Alex's fantasies of being discovered it sounds like she has a tender heart.  A rare and welcome quality in gts fiction.

Eagerly awaiting your next installment.

Cheers



Author's Response:

we'll just have to see, won't we? ;)  hard to be noticed when you're only about a fourth of an inch tall

Reviewer: littlemac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 18 2012 5:08 PM Title: Chapter 4: Death March

Got some good suspense buillding, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.



Author's Response:

thanks!

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