[Report This]Date: October 27 2012 2:31 PM Title: Chapter 2: Matriarchal Rule
Great chapter. Loved her choice in toe nail color. An her attitude toward him being shrunken is great as well as his first height. Hope that she has him give her sexy feet/toes a nice sensual rub. Love how she tries to reassure him that it's perfectly fine because just she can shrink him an his siblings just at her whim is quite sexy. Hope that there is more to come.
aaron
Author's Response:
there is definitely more to come, and soon
[Report This]Date: October 27 2012 8:30 AM Title: Chapter 2: Matriarchal Rule
Loving this so far, a very good start.
I really enjoy your writing style, and your grammar and punctuation is near perfect, which is also a plus. Nothing more distracting in my opinion of a story that is full of errors that force you out of the reading enjoyment. Too, as I have mentioned in other reviews, I like descriptive details; what the people are wearing, setting the scene of the room and surroundings and even similes.
Finally your characters seem real to me. They speak and react like normal people despite the abnormal situation. No flowerey speeches or annoying pet names but a mother and a son who, under other conditions would seem typically normal.
Definitely looking forward to further chapters. Wondering if and how the mother might change as the situation escalates and how the brother and sister will eventually react. Keep up the great work!
carnaj
Author's Response:
thanks, i really appreciate it. i definitely intend on tackling in this story both the mother's developing personality and the subject of scott's siblings