[Report This]Date: December 20 2016 8:17 AM Title: Small Doses (Part 2)
Hi again. It’s funny, I started reading this chapter, and I began to feel some annoyance at the tiny things that need to be fixed, truly minor details here and there. Then I opened my eyes in disbelief at the fact that he simply showed up at the doctor’s office, at that size! Please understand that has NOTHING to do with your skill as a writer, or even as a storyteller. That is simply my maternal instinct kicking in, when I read that a tiny man has ventured out into the world, unprotected, danger lurking everywhere…
Then I forgot all about being vexed when I got to the sexy parts. Super sexy parts! I loved the way she teased him, examined him (could have read about that on and on) and had her way with him. But then I didn’t like that he simply left again, walked out that door to face the world a shrunken man, utterly defenseless.
I’m reading on!
Author's Response:
Yes, I often do find I leave in the odd typo or two, among other things.
I would say that if he's signed up to the doctors already, then with this being the UK and the NHS, he should be fine. Maybe that's a cultural difference there.
I had him walk on his own as a, slightly, silly suspension of disbelief to be honest. It's designed, slightly, to highlight the ludicrous nature of the subject matter, a nod to how daft shrinking is, and how charmed their world is. I wanted your maternal instinct to kick in. You're supossed to not want him to do that.
My main aim was to give them a world where he treats his 'affliction' (improvment) as the same as a common cold. The old-school stoic man. Let me know what you think when you're done.