[Report This]Date: October 24 2014 11:44 AM Title: Chapter 1
I love this story and the way it´s twisting and turning. As I already commited in the Review I wrote yesterday on your other Story (Theophobia), I absolutely love the way you take your time to describe things and how you go deep into the details of everything. Normal humen (the none GTS dudes) in your stories do not just appear to be killed of... they have personalities, their own purpose and you show that in an awesome way... I think that even if I weren´t into GTS stuff or anything involved with it I would still find your stories absolutely great. I will definately also read your other stories as well and I know already that I will devour them just like I did the ones I´ve already read.
According to me you are already a master of writing because I just love to read your stories and I could go on and on and on reading them... Personally I would have liked it if you would have described omewhere the basic looks of Aria... Haircolor, Eyes and so on... that way the readers mind can draw a better picture of your original intention about her looks. Here and there it would be great to read something mor about the victims... like a description of how an unlucky guy feels when her foot comes down on him, crushing his bones, forcing his guts out and so on. I love the way you always remember the guilt a GTS must feel and the way you try to explain why and how she´s capable to bring on the horror to people...
A master like you doesn´t need to get any clues on how to become better but I´d still like to point out the link to an old story to you and I´d ove for you to read it. The way the inner feelings of the GTS the way heer killing is justified and the gorescenes are awesome there... maybe you´ll like it. http://giantessworld.net/Stories6/island.htm
Oh... and before I forget... That thing she tried to to in the city where she wanted to have some anal action.... let her have some ;)
Thanx for writing such awesome Stories !!!
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review, man! I've posted a much bigger response on DeviantArt. :)
Date: July 12 2013 11:02 PM Title: Chapter 1
Well I love this story man, I loved it even when it was full-blown violent, and I tend to steer clear of that stuff...Though it's kinda growing on me.
Keep writting dude, this is definitely one of my favs at the moment.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like it so much. :)
[Report This]Date: July 12 2013 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love Gentle Aria, however messed up she may still be. I still want her to get her ass kicked, she's an evil bitch, so I am kinda satisfided that she's a little threatened by Mae's words. But I get the feeling that Mae isn't a knight in shining armor either (and what a cunt for leaving Mase behind like that), so at least I welcome the bit of gentleness she displayed here. It's weird though, wasn't Aria supposed to be Omniscient? Can't she just read Mase's mind and get the information she wants that way? Ahh, whatever man I dont sweat the details.
Author's Response:
Man, you're like the only person commenting! Hehe.
Anyway, no, Aria is not omniscient. The little part where she says she is a few chapters ago is merely a sarcastic remark. She can't read minds. There is sort of a magic/technology system here, although not fully revealed so far, but Aria is no true god, just somebody with incredible powers.
Also, the way I got this planned out, I think you will like it, but it will surprise you. This story isn't really a back and white story, good vs evil, but lies more in the 'grey area', even though so far it's not really apparent. But I've only written about 35k words so far and I've got lots and lots planned, I only need the motivation :).
[Report This]Date: April 18 2013 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 1
Loved every bit of this story and I wish you luck on whatever you have planned next.
Author's Response:
Thanks! Hopefully I've learned enough by writing Broken Sky to make my next story better written. I still feel like the prose is way too simple and I've made too many rookie mistakes.
Date: March 31 2013 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 1
I see where you're coming from with there being so much to cover that time simply cannot allow for you to cover it all and also live your daily life. It has been a great story, and I (and many more) have really enjoyed the interesting twists and turns you put to it. Can't wait to read the final chapter!
Perhaps we will see another story from you?... hopefully one that doesn't grow too out of control for you?
Author's Response:
Well, I've made it a mission for me to write 100k words in 2013, so, I hope to fullfill it by writing GTS stories and leaving my footprint here. Expect a lot from me this year... I hope. :D
[Report This]Date: March 30 2013 9:03 PM Title: Chapter 1
Next chapter is the last huh? I hope you come to some sort of conclusion, its going to be tough to capture in writting. To me it doesn't look like anything is going to change in the end, shes just too damn powerful for anyone to fight back...She'll prolly continue doing as she pleases. Great story by the way, im glad you've gotten this far along.
Author's Response:
And I still am not done with this. As I've said on Amateur Wordsmith's review, I'll explain after I finish the last chapter.
[Report This]Date: February 10 2013 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 1
You have some excellent content here. Your character development is intriguing and layered without hindering the effectiveness of the destruction segments, which are tantalizingly realized and descriptive. There's a certain rawness to those scenes that I can't quite place; you capture the violence and brutality of the situations very well. Your psychological explorations are a lot of fun, too, and you do a nice job of playing off of whatever's going on action-wise in the tale at that point in a way that lets the reader connect with the giantess' psyche while still regarding her as villainous. Keep it up.
Author's Response:
Well, that's a damn good review I would say! It's great to have such a positive review from one of the best writers around here, thanks jacksmith!
Date: February 10 2013 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is an excelent story I love your use of descriptive language and the city destruction was... well amazing
Author's Response:
Thanks, I hope to continue with some city-destruction scenes in a few chapters.
Date: February 08 2013 8:00 AM Title: Chapter 1
Excellent work on Chapter 8! I really like how things went! Love how you left things unanswered at the end of it all. It makes the next chapter almost unbearable to wait for!
Author's Response:
There's a lot more to reveal, it's just that I have to think hard about how to do so and keep the integrity of the story intact because afterall this is a GTS story and GTS interaction is the primary theme here. It's definitely a lot harder to write a GTS story with a plot.
Unfortunately, I have some important exams coming up and I'm not sure if I'll be able to update this until March...
[Report This]Date: February 07 2013 3:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
I really dont know where your going with this story but I gotta say I love the mysteries behind Aria and her powers..And the fact that the story reveals them in tidbits over time. Aria is a great character and I love learning about her backstory even at the expense of the sexy stuff! This is a great and well thought-out story, definitely on of my favorites.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like the story part too. :)
Date: February 01 2013 12:16 AM Title: Chapter 1
The plot is getting deeper and you're improving with the writing, which is nice. It keeps the story very interesting. However, don't forget that you still need to include some "sexy stuff" here and there when you decide to jump into the real meat and potatoes of your story. I know it can be difficult to do so, especially when there is so much to cover, but just keep in mind that this is a website for GIANTESS stories.
I admit, I am a very "encounter-loving" reader when it comes to the stories on this site. I get the biggest thrill when there is giantess interaction, detailed scenes, micro-level scenarios, etc. That's obvious from my older reviews. However, I just wanted to share with you MY opinions/suggestions. My intention was everything but to be mean and unhelpful!
Author's Response:
Thanks again. Of course I understand that those stories need to be Giantess stories, but I find it hard to restrain myself from babbling about the story part too much, I still want everything to make sense and I'm still on the process of learning how to write, so sometimes when I write a chapter, it gets so big that I decide to cut the story and the sexy stuff part in two pieces, like this one. So, I guess there are going to be chapters in the future where I'll write just to move the story along, but still most chapters are going to be about Giantess interaction. Maybe I just need to write longer chapters, so it includes both.
Also don't worry about being unhelpful or anything lol! I find it that you learn the most from constructive criticism, something which is apparently lacking here. Other than from you and a few others, I don't seem to get many reviews compared to other stories here, even though judging by the read count its popular enough I guess. I still don't know how people feel about this. But oh well, as long as I have the time, I'll write.
Also, thanks for the suggestions! I'll keep them in mind. :)
Date: January 22 2013 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 1
Love the new chapter. I like how in the story you keep her "toys" at micro size. I don't really have any suggestions for the actual plot of the story. I think that that is going very well. However, I would love to see more detailed singled-out, or one on one scenes with the goddess and one of her captives. I can't speak for others, but personally I love when the focus is on the tinies, and how she humiliates them.
I.e., smearing them into her pussy, sucking them off her fingers, and or both... sprinkling them on her body, etc.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review again! Actually, I was now going for a more personal touch now, singled-out scenarios as you say. The giantess will get to know some of them more personally, they will have names etc. Right now, I'm writing the plot that leads to it, so that it makes sense in the end. To be honest, the plot is my primary focus, I just want to learn how to write and I can't do that by just writing about giantess interaction.
[Report This]Date: January 20 2013 1:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice work on the latest chapter, I like the fact that she actually has some tiny people she considers friends to an extent, and then turns around an massacres a whole lot of them just because. I think she is a good character and it seems that she has all this power and uses it on a whim but also wants to have friends that love her. Cant wait to see where you take this.
PS: Is she like a war with another god or something?
Author's Response:
You could say she is at war with... something. That I will of course releval as the story progresses. Also, just to be clear (since apparently I've not pointed it out clearly enoug), she can change sizes at will (sort of, it's more or less the central idea of this story). On the ship, when she talks with the commnader and walks around, she is normal sized like all others and the people she captured have been shrunken.
[Report This]Date: January 14 2013 10:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice work on the latest chapter, I do like this story, although Im more into the gentle stuff. I like the way she's teasing them with her piss, and I like the fact that you added some backstory to this, not many people care to flesh their stories out like this. Keep it up, I'll be reading!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I do find that adding a story makes inclined to write more, keeps you from constantly repeating the same things over and over. I wish I could write a more gentle, more personal story, but I seem to have passed that threshold a long time ago.
Date: January 14 2013 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 1
Nice job on the latest chapter. Hope to see more!!
Author's Response:
Thank you. It seems like you're the only one who really cares to write something here. It looks people here don't really like stories that have lots of gruesome violence in them. I really don't get enough feedback to know if I'm doing a good job or not.
Date: December 17 2012 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
Have you downloaded either Office Libre or Open Office? They are free and you may prefer one of them to what you're using at the moment.
Author's Response:
I have MS Word, don't think I'll need anything more. I prefer Google Drive because I can write from anywhere and multiple PC-s.
Anyway, the bug is now fixed :)
[Report This]Date: December 17 2012 4:32 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is great, although im not sure why the second chapter needed to be in bold. But good start, and great descriptions I hope you finish this.
Author's Response:
It was not my intention to post it in bold, but this site's text editor just wouldn't let me unbold it. I'll try to fix it as soon as I can, but this must be a bug or something, since I'm writing my stories on google drive, and then just copy paste, the transfer must be causing something weird.
Date: December 17 2012 2:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
I like the build up, although you need to work on your fortmatting. Your spelling is good but I would suggest looking at the "Writing Tools" section of giantessworld.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the advice. I'll definitely check that section again, it's been a while. Also I'll read other tips, re-read my story, spot my mistakes and improve, this is my main motivation for writing this story anyway.