Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: January 10 2016 7:32 AM Title: Chapter 9

Three years at least? Seriously, this is an __amazing__ story!!!

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: April 23 2013 5:26 PM Title: Chapter 9

I found the text in italics confusing as I had to reread the first few setenaces until I understood because the first one is:

I must look ridiculous..

And it threw me because I was at first under the impression the story was written in first person. If you're going to write in the third person stick to that and try not to include thoughts unless they are in speech marks.