Reviewer: Dudemanguy Signed [Report This]
Date: February 01 2013 4:24 PM Title: Chapter 2

Ok, your layout is much better. Now onto tip# 2. Description. Being a first story, you can just stretch your arms, feeling about, trying to see what fits best in your story. But always add in that little bit of description so we know what's what, or where he is. I am still a little forgetful but it helps if you just think about it. Better chapter.