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Reviewer: Tigernach Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 03 2018 5:01 PM Title: Chapter 2

Having just read these first two chapters, I find the concept for the tale to be quite interesting, and look forward to seeing where it goes.

If you do as well with this story as you have done with Stainless, you will have me as a firm fan.

Reviewer: Tigernach Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21 2016 12:21 PM Title: Chapter 2

It has been over 3 years since you last entered more of your story, and for someone who shows so much promise, that is really a great shame. Do you plan to continue your two stories, or is your work fini? I certainly hope that this is not the end. Looking forward to your continuing.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16 2013 1:48 PM Title: Chapter 2

It's nice to see you back and I'm guessing you've got some good ideas for this story. I'm guessing it may end with a wedding scene? You mention the 'Darkstreets' without actually explaing what they are, leaving the reader to guess. Also you swtich between past and present tense. Such as here:

In fact, that's exactly where

You mean:

that was

Herere:

Will be be alright?

You mean he

And here:

in no less than a month

I think you mean: no more than a month

 



Author's Response:

Yikes, I will definitely get on some much-needed revising. Sorry about that.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2013 10:51 AM Title: Chapter 2

Now, how is Alice going to lure him to the palace?* Promise him money for the medical bills? Or will she simply drug/shrink/reawaken/re-enlarge him? Obviously, only the relatively prompt posting of chapter 3 will answer that question. ;-)



*Poetry not intended.

Author's Response:

Ahaha, I caught that last part. ;) I definitely won't be long this time.

Reviewer: sketch Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2013 9:23 AM Title: Chapter 2

Great to see you back.  I'm a fan of your stuff.  I've dawn a comic very similar in concept to this story, so I'm interested to see where you take this.

On the story, looks like Alice was checking out a nice young doctor as a marriage candidate.  Classic, if you're going to look at commoners, it's the obvious place to start.  But does Alexander possibly now have a shot?

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