Date: June 20 2014 5:29 AM Title: Chapter 18
Im looking forward to future updates this is a story i really like.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comment, its a big motivator. I posted chapter 19 shortly after you typed this.
Date: June 04 2014 4:31 AM Title: Chapter 18
This chapter seemed to go on forever. Anyway, I did spot two mistakes.
Here:
You can keep you man-pet then!,” Phil yelled, “We'll go!”
You mean: your
Here:
“Aww, come on Tommy, don't be made at me, pretty pleeeeasse?”
You mean: mad
Author's Response:
Yeah it was pretty long, I prolly should have split it into two parts. Thanks for the error check.
Date: June 03 2014 6:35 AM Title: Chapter 18
Yep, you are definitely on a roll, Kim is definitely a giggling landscape! I am curious to see how you handle the human colony, how will they react to being told that a Lyrian is at the gates? Like a city under siege?
Author's Response:
I still havent planned out the colony chapter but suffice to say they will react poorly!