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Reviewer: Flaming_Heart Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 14 2015 10:24 PM Title: Return

Interesting how Melody lied to Claire about Corey not wanting to go to the party. Now she's getting blamed for "forgetting."

Author's Response:

Heh. Well, one can't say Melody isn't willing to sacrifice!

Thank you for the review.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 14 2015 8:22 PM Title: Return

Awesome to this return to the main three so to speak, great stuff.



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Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for commenting!

Reviewer: Jacksmith Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14 2015 7:24 PM Title: Return

I like how everything seems to be converging toward this party now, with the various prior threads of the story all at least being touched on tangentially with this chapter. Normally I turn my nose up a little at Jenna but I kinda love that little gesture where she holds her finger over Naomi's face. Also interesting to hear mention of her emotional difficulties, which I was not expecting to see come up; still crossing my fingers that that thread gets tugged a little more down the line. I was glad too that we got to see Claire reacting to Corey's absence, as I'd been curious if she'd just let such a thing drop. Judging by how suspicious she appeared that Melody would goof something up, I assume the matter isn't closed for her. I am very very curious to see if that's a conflict you choose to play with at some point. Finally it was nice to see Naomi coming back into contact with Steph after all the turmoil. A sweet little cliffhanger end there.

Reviewer: Cain Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 11 2015 1:19 PM Title: Retreat - Part 2

Awesome Chapter! Poor Corey...and Meldoy for that matter! Sits and waits for another awesome chapter. *Sits*



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Well you didn't have to sit too long :). Thanks for commenting!

Reviewer: Flaming_Heart Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 07 2015 10:45 PM Title: Retreat - Part 2

Amazing chapter, it sure was a lot to take in. I feel like I understand what happened at the end. But I also feel like I don't understand what happened at the end.

Oh man I can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response:

Thank you for the kind words. Hopefully I can provide the next chapter in a timely manner :)

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07 2015 9:17 PM Title: Retreat - Part 2

Case book PTSD behavior. Poor Corey.



Author's Response:

Indeed :(. Though I'm glad my depiction here came through as such a thing. Thanks for comment!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 07 2015 5:24 PM Title: Retreat - Part 2

So, let me get this striaght. He's neither growing nor shrinking. He merely interfered with his bacta treatments (if you'll excuse the SW reference) partly to shower with Melody. And, partly, to have a semi-legit excuse not to go to the party (due to still-sensitive bones).

Author's Response:

Precisely!

Reviewer: Cloud Signed [Report This]
Date: June 07 2015 5:19 PM Title: Retreat - Part 2

That was a heavy chapter, we do get to see some more of Corey's mind, and how it's changed due to the trauma of his accident. I quite enjoyed the interactions this chapter, and the reveal of what Corey had done, I suppose I thought it might be more serious, but I'm glad it wasn't; for this chapter, thank you.



Author's Response:

I'm very glad you enjoyed this peek into his psyche. Thank you for commenting!

Reviewer: Cain Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 06 2015 3:27 PM Title: Imprisonment

I just found this story and I do believe I was so hooked I read it all in no time I couldn't stop then I saw the other Omega series stories and read them all as well and I am currently reading this again! Oh my god man! the feels and the storyline are amazing also the universe you have created leaves me begging for more please please keeping writting on this series for as long as possible!!!!



Author's Response:

Glad to hear you've enjoyed this little project of mine :). And don't worry. While I can't always promise speedy new additions, I intend to keep adding to this series for quite some time.

 

Thank you very much for commenting.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 3:04 PM Title: Imprisonment

Re: my chapter 8 review? I meant to say "Jack Smith." My bad!

Author's Response:

I was very confused for a moment!

Taking in all your comments at once, thank you very much for giving my little series a spin, and for your kind words. Hopefully I continue to make the time investment worth your while!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 3:00 PM Title: Talk

So, Claire is the first Omega able to control the temperature of this mysterious "Fire," huh? Intriguing! The closest comparison I can think of is: what if a certain galaxy far, far away had been governed by the Dark Side of the Force right from the start? Only to have a Light Side-oriented "heresy" develop?

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 2:59 PM Title: Retreat - Part 1

Hoo-boy! I can think of only two things that might be the source of their dumbfounded amazement. Either Corey is mysteriously growing to Alpha size...or he's going to become this parallel Earth's first Gamma-class person.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 1:48 PM Title: Place - Part 2

Whew! You--and Melody--had me worried there, for a second.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 1:32 PM Title: Place - Part 1

Oh, shit! :-(

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 1:29 PM Title: Boil

WOW!!!!!

So, this is the trend-setting tale from which Nostory got the inspiration to do his Omegaworld pastiches. Absolutely riveting! And, I mean that in the sense that I've read these first eight chapters straight through!! Something unusual where my reviews are concerned.

That being said; let me prolong my long-windedness by praising you on the plausibility of all your characters' emotional displays. Jenna and Marion, especially! They both seem to feel that greater height makes right. The only real difference between them (aside from size and mass) being the way they implement their attitudes.

Marion = indiscriminate persecution and torture.

Jenna = smothering over-protectiveness.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 12:32 PM Title: Omega

"As long as you don't act out, you ahve nothing to worry about." Brilliant!

Selp-help philosophies are always more memorable when they rhyme. I'm not saying that a rhyme scheme guarantees 100% success of the philosophy in question! But, it does make it difficult to forget.

Reviewer: Cloud Signed [Report This]
Date: June 01 2015 7:50 AM Title: Retreat - Part 1

Sounds like some ominous premonitions this chapter, I guess it could be a few things. It could be Suicide, or a stubborn action that Corey is doing for Melody, or even a dark and twisted action that may show us more of Corey's recently damaged psyche. I hope to see this cliff-hanger resolved.



Author's Response:

Could be any number of things, sadly :(. We'll have to see in the next post. Thanks for sharing your thoughts!

Reviewer: wwebby Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 01 2015 5:07 AM Title: Retreat - Part 1

Aw, Corey and Melody. <3



Author's Response:

<3 indeed :3. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 31 2015 4:33 PM Title: Retreat - Part 1

Great to see it back.



Author's Response:

Glad to have it back :). Thanks for commenting.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31 2015 3:37 PM Title: Retreat - Part 1

I would certainly enjoy more Corey/Melody alone time! Great chapter, I'm looking forward to the update to this story and that side story by Jacksmith too!



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed it, hope I can continue to deliver. Thanks for the comments!

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