[Report This]Date: January 19 2014 12:08 AM Title: There's Always Something Bigger
You have my deepest gratitude with adding a bath scene my friend and you even made it important for plot development with the whole bra in the lake that was a nice touch. I hadn't even considered that possibility!!!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks, see I said that suggestions were likely to be used! I wasn't just saying that!
Date: January 18 2014 5:00 PM Title: There's Always Something Bigger
I'am loving the story,though I think Michael is the best element in the story so far,I think that you could keep his temperament and like,make him a lone wolf and make Natalie care and search for him,I think this would increase drama to the story,wich is something that lacks in most stories,you have everything to make some of the best stories by mixing GTS and other styles like drama and etc. Also I liked the part wich Natalie kick the raptor and it broke his spine,would love to see more scenes like this (with more details) and some crush scenes (maybe a battle with a group of raptors) and unaware (crush,yeah I'am a crush lover) with smaller dinossaurs. The story is yours and I'am just leaving some sugestions.
Author's Response:
Wow, I love these kinda reviews because they make tons of ideas pop into my head! I like the idea of one person being more alone since one's so dependent already. You'll see some of what you asked for in return for such a helpful review.
Date: January 18 2014 3:09 PM Title: There's Always Something Bigger
Oh, and I was happy that Natalie's punishment of Michael didn't get too brutal.