Reviewer: ottovpr Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29 2014 7:24 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident

great... please... continue the story!!!

Author's Response:

I will, don't you worry! I'm just really really busy on weekdays, so I tried to write two chapters before I started my week >.< Look forward to it in the coming weekend!

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 4:54 AM Title: Day 0: An Accident

Well I was expecting something more sinister from Sylvia but she did just fine there. I am expecting problems since you did say that giantesses once enslaved humanity so there may still be giantesses who feel the same way.

  Fine debut story from you, keep it up! The only thing worse than No story is an unfinished one. 

Author's Response:

Thank you! I'll definitely be touching on the history of the world, so stay clued in!

Reviewer: riczar Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21 2014 6:24 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident

A good start!  I agree that asking for the date came too quickly.  You could have built the relationship up a little more before he did that.  It was possible, since he was going to see her the next day anyway while she delivers his new scooter. 

I'm going to assume by the way you've worded things that this is a world with only giant women, no giant men.  Does that mean in order to produce more giantesses, they have to breed with normal size males?

While reading I was wondering if this was a world where all females are giant, and all males are small.  You didn't mention the sex of any other person, so it could be a possibilty (one that I welcome btw).

I looked forward to seeing how this pans out.

Author's Response:

Thanks for reading! I plan on expamding on the gender distribution in the future, but for now I've only had giantesses in mind. Do you have any preferences to this?

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21 2014 1:13 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident

An interesting start. The bit about the urban giantess licence is funny to me for some reason. The part where he says:

“PLEASE GO OUT WITH ME!”

Seems a bit unrealistic. I don't feel it's very believable since I doubt anyone would say such a thing that soon after meeting a person. Plus, when I read the story was a diary (the title) I had certain preconceived notions about what a diary is. What I'm trying to say is, I feel the title is somewhat misleading. Unless of course you do plan format it like diary later on because I don't think he'd able to remember every single thing that was said that day. It reads more like a fairly standard story.

A diary is meant to be emotive and descriptive. A diary contains a person's innermost thoughts after all. However I'm not really feeling the emotion.

Here:

I'd say. Giantess's like her were about fifty feet tall

You mean: giantesses

That apostrophe represents single ownership. If it was after then s then it would be multiple ownership.

Here:

assured me, picking up the sad

You mean: she assured me

Author's Response:

Thanks for the the critique! While the idea for this story's been in my head for a while, the actual writing of it was very spur of the moment, so I really didn't plan out how things would unfold. I agree that the confession was really weird, and I called the story 'Giantess Dating Diary' (GDD) because I happened to also be writing a game design document (GDD) at the same time, haha. Thanks for picking up on the mistakes too, I wrote this in bearly four hours, so I knew there had to be stuff I missed x.x

 

If there's anything else you'd like to see, do let me know :) Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: omicron20 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21 2014 12:11 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident

I really like the setup and think there is a lot of potential here. I'm looking forward to seeing where you take it. 

Author's Response:

Thanks for reading! I'm looking forward to how I'm taking this story forward too, I haven't written in a long time!