[Report This]Date: September 14 2016 5:12 AM Title: Chapter 17
Probably your best chapter from a fan service perspective. Not exactly anything new for Laura, this is all within the scope of her character. But the chapter was still well written! Not gonna lie, I've kinda gotten lazy when writing reviews, so it'll be abit before I write one abouttge latest chapter...I do like how fast you've been updating recently tho! Anyway I'm gonna drop a few bucks in your tip jar after this, hopefully PayPal doesn't give me issues.
Date: September 14 2016 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 18
I just read the latest chapter, and saw the note about reviews.
I've tried to contact you multiple ways before, via GiantessCity and this site, but with no reply.
I left a tip and I just want to say that your stories are easily the best I have ever read in Giantess fiction.
It's a hugely impressive tale, with belivable characters and compelling backstories.
That said, I feel absolutely crushed (no pun intended) that Rayadés didn't make it in this chapter. I was almost shouting at the screen for her to speak up.
I wish she'd made it through to become friends with Laura, but I suppose that only illustrates the quality of your writing when I care that much about a minor character.
I hope you continue this story for a long time to come and do not become discouraged at the lack of feedback.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much. THIS is what keeps authors going.
I really wanted to know if someone would like Rayadés. I loved and hated her at the same time. For once, her parts basically wrote themselves within minutes and she got the most thorough backstory of any character thus far. I wanted her to be observant, modest and feminine, but she was just so utterly in the wrong place that it hurt.
I am so sorry I did not see your message on GTS world. I barely spend any time over there anymore and the notification is just tiny. There is no private message system on THIS site, is there? I sent you a reply with a little goodie. Thanks again.
Date: September 14 2016 1:21 AM Title: Prologue
This story has been a hell of a yarn really. I didn't see it lasting this long back when I first read it but you are still at it and still delivering good stuff still so guess I'll wait and see what's next !
[Report This]Date: September 11 2016 7:02 AM Title: Chapter 16
Personally, I'm never a fan of backstory but I do understand its importance. I just am not patient enough but thats just me. I dont really have a favorite character but your disclaimer about them being offed is pretty hilarious lol
Author's Response:
Ha, thanks. I think you're the only one still reading this anyway.
[Report This]Date: September 10 2016 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 16
I can't be an asshat anymore as you have put so much time into this story. I chipped in a few bucks.
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot! Did you like the chapter? What's your favourite character ?
[Report This]Date: August 21 2016 8:02 PM Title: Prologue
Very good story!
You really put a lot of effort in it.
Would more frequent updates, but shorter chapters be an idea, or would this ruin the story?
Author's Response:
Thanks. Yeah, that wouldn't work. I need to be able to go back and change stuff to make the whole thing more round and keep it from turning into one of those snuff-porn stories entirely. I tried writing chapters in advance and then publish them steadily bit by bit. But I'm much too itchy to publsih for that and I have great gaps in my writing time, so it didn't work out very well for the story, though I got a ton of reviews when I tried. Most chapters won't be near as long as that last one anyway. I don't really now how that happened either. I feel like the next chapter is almost already done by the way, so stay tuned. Thank's again.
[Report This]Date: August 20 2016 1:23 AM Title: Prologue
For the longest time my favorite story on this website was Jacksmith's magnum opus, Julia. It still might be my favorite. Jack's use of character work and emotion allows me to view it as a real story, despite the more porn-y parts, like the self-insert protagonist and the unnecessary sex parts. It is a porn story, I had to keep telling myself, this is the best it gets.
I've just finished Chapter 6 (AKA Chapter 5), and it seems like the end of a TV season of sorts, so I figure I might as well write about your story and my thoughts on it so far.
So far, the first six/five chapters are the best story I've ever read on this site, because there are a lot of moments where it doesn't feel too porn-y. Ultimately the only part that kinda has that feel to it is when Laura asks for all the girls, but even then that was kind of just the one part. And for anyone not caught up reading this, spoilers until the final paragraph.
You broke major GiantessWorld.net rules by killing Marvin off. Not literally, where you have like, I don't know, done something against the site regulations. But doing that showed me this was a different story. Being the only true "narrator" of the story, you really felt for him, and I know I inserted myself into his shoes. After surviving being pissed on, and the sacrifice, to see him die gives you major props.
By the way, being a GoT and ASoIaF fan, I can tell you're one too. You killed off the main character to shock audiences. You use the terms "little lord", "usurper", "sellsword" and "bastard." But it's not too in your face, don't get me wrong. It actually kind of fits. Having these modern girls stuck in a fantasy type world, it makes sense to evoke, reference and even come close on parodying one of the most successful fantasy series out there.
All in all, I can't wait to read more. And at the next end that feels like a proper season, I'll post an update, say how my thoughts might have changed, or congratulate you on how thy haven't. I have high hopes, George R. R-oops-I mean squashed123. I make that mistake all the time. *wink*
Author's Response:
Thank you. And yes, the influences are many. When I played Tony Hawk's Pro Skater as a kid, I bought a skateboard and went out, skating for real. Now, when I listen to the GoT audiobooks I get the itch to write a story for myself. But GoT is by far not the only influence, there are at least two other that should be easy to point out. Let's see if you can do.
I hated Marvin from the fucking get-go. He survived this and survived that and wouldn't die, the stupid fucker. I was so releaved when he was dead.
If you are up to chapter five now, I dare say there is a lot you can look forward to, even though it gets a bit porny at times. Please take your time and let me know what you think. I would especially like to know if there is visible improvement in my writing and how you like the dialogues. Thanks again, and enjoy.
Date: August 19 2016 5:27 PM Title: Chapter 15
Though I really do appreciate how well this story is written, and I am tempted to donate even 5 bucks, the fact you seem to specificially single me out to not respond to is makes the decesion not to. Reviews work both ways. If you cant be bothered to respond to them I'm not gonna waste my time writing them. Just sayin.
Author's Response:
Sorry man. I was going to post the first part, and then the first two parts as an addition to the previous chapter because you said it was your birthday. I even meant to write 'for writer27' in the notes, after the first two parts were finished quite quickly. But then I wrote, and wrote and wrote and didn't want to publish yet because I was having so much fun and I wanted it to be one big chapter. So, my egoism go in the way of the favour I meant to do to you, but what you said got me writing that chapter in the first place, and that was really great. Also, I never thought you guys read what I reply to you. You don't get a message or anything and you'd only check on this story when there is a new chapter which is months, sometimes years after. I wrote reviews I wanted replies to and never got and so I just stopped checking. Perhaps that's bad, I agree. I'll try and be more thorough, but I still think you guys appreciate it more if I spent my time writing the story instead of comments.
I'm glad for anyone reading and enjoying this story. I don't have a system by which to reply to reviews. And the tip jar isn't that important. I put it in to silence my fiancee who got quite angry after I spent the last few weeks writing 7-9 hours a day instead of doing any work and therby not making a dime. She is scowling over my shoulder as I write this, for it's saturday and I choose to spend my time on this rather than her. There is a ton of stuff I should rather be doing but I am trapped in Lauraville, and the giantesses won't let me out before I finish my mission.
[Report This]Date: August 19 2016 3:15 AM Title: Chapter 15
Pretty good chapter! I really hope at some point Jenna and Laura face a plausible threat like they did with Vengyr. So far only that wizard has been able to hurt them in any substantial way, I think they need to get knocked down a few pegs. I suppose Fabio being able to sort of sway Jenna with magic is kinda cool.
Anyway I wanted to leave a tip but it's not accepting my credit card for some reason, as soon as the issue is fixed i'll drop a few pounds.
[Report This]Date: July 28 2016 7:30 PM Title: Chapter 14
Spectacular chapter. Thorsten is a fucking legend. No Janna or Laura in this chapter but so fucking what. This chapter put me on the battlefield with León and Thorsten. The way it started with them infiltrating Diego's faction blew my socks off. I didn't expect that at all and that whole thing was written perfectly, especially when they were discovered too. The chapter was a non-stop roller coaster ride and I loved every bit of it. And the mountain men stuff was better still because Thorsten shows why he's a badass. One thing I will say is that when you described Thorsten this chapter I always pictured Bjorn from Vikings(and I was kinda close).
They make it to the settlement or Lauraville and Dari has Nagash squash all except León and Thorsten. I wouldn't put it past Nagash to try and finagle Dari by squishing some random villager in place of Diego, don't know as to why yet but I wouldn't put it past her(I'm only jumping to conclusions because he was the only one face down).
Again great story and can't wait to see what happens next or what will happen when Janna and Laura eventually move.
aaron
PS how did Christie and Steve get back into the village after Janna put them on her pillow? I actually wouldn't have asked but the bar wench that Laura squished under her foot made it down from the bed too but was unable to make it outside. Not trying to nitpick.
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot!
Yes, I head Bjorn in mind when I wrote Thorsten. He's young and naive but fighting just comes naturally to him. But Diego was the only one squashed face UP, indicating that Nagash made it more personal since he had been an enemy of Dexter. Also, I wrote twice that Janna had put Christina and Steve in the village. The reason is going to be explained in the next chapter, but it is pretty obvious I think.
Thanks again for your review(s). You never miss to leave one and I am very grateful for that.
[Report This]Date: July 23 2016 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 13
I've been keeping up with this story for a while and this chapter was easily my favorite yet. We're getting pretty deep into this fascinating world you've built, I'm excited to see how far you can take it. This is definitely one of the most creative and imaginative works I've stumbled across on this site. Thanks for your effort!
[Report This]Date: July 22 2016 10:31 AM Title: Chapter 14
The more I read this story and the more the things gets interesting.
Now we can see some pieces of the puzzle coming into place. For example I liked how you managed the encounter between Dari, Thorsten and Leon, and I liked a lot the way in which you made them prove that they were not lying.
Anyway, the more the story proceeds and the more I have the feeling that it is a wonderful giantess-version of the "game of thrones".
Perhaps did you got inspired by it? ;)
Anyway, now the chapter is over and I'm here again, waiting for the next and wondering how long will be the wait. >.<
Awesome job, as always! *clap hands*
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks a bunch. Yes, GoT inspired me quite a bit. I'm already heavily into the next chapter. Shouldn't take too long (so only a few months maybe, lol). I could post more, smaller chapters. That way I'd certainly get more views and reviews but I feel that it could hurt the overarching storyline. In a long chapter, I often back to the end and alter things to make the whole thing more round.
Thanks for the review, it means a lot to me.
Date: July 15 2016 8:23 PM Title: Chapter 14
Pretty good chapter, but no GTS content unless you count the Nagesh stuff. Not my favorite chapter not gonna lie, but this story is still one of my favorites!
[Report This]Date: July 15 2016 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 14
I have been checking this story hoping for updates for MONTHS. Literally, eagerly waiting to see something. This update literally happened on my birthday and I have to say its the best present ever. Thank you. This chapter was a LONG read and, a lot of otherness aside from giantess stuff. And I would be upset but it was very well written. Bravo man bravo. Please continue some of us are on our seats waiting.
[Report This]Date: June 08 2016 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 13
Lots of world building here, which is still a very significant plus compared to most stories I've read. Details and a well done style, though there are a few minor spelling errors here and there.
The two main characters finally meet resistance with seige machines, though Janna seemed to be able to start making short work of them as soon as she was close enough.
This chapter did well with remarking about how the two main characters are so resistant to everything, but it is interesting to note that they are scared of seige machines. Having something that they actually have trouble defeating besides their own hunger makes them a lot more interesting, though in all likelihood they will probably not have much trouble taking down a tower if they actually grit their teeth and went all the way.
[Report This]Date: March 16 2016 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 13
I'm really glad you came back to this. I'm curious to see where it goes now that they are scared to be hurt. The, "she just left" excuse seemed kinda weak but, overall thanks for coming back :)
Date: March 16 2016 1:02 PM Title: Prologue
Good story. You write very long chapters and don't even beg for reviews ;)
I hope a certain kingdom gets destroyed.
Date: March 15 2016 2:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
Just finished chapter 1. Well done with the ladies different views.
Later,
Diesel
Date: March 15 2016 6:59 AM Title: Chapter 13
Danny Furio made it out alive by a hairs width. It seems the only way to deal with Jenna and Laura is with bewitching spells instead of direct damage. I'm also glad that these two were caught off guard and had to run like cowards, it's the least that can happen to them after all the pointless death and suffering they've caused.
Date: March 15 2016 4:08 AM Title: Prologue
Yes, I've only read the prologue. And this review was done in the context of you contacting me on Devianart. I believe I had answered all of your questions, though you never told me if I had answered them sufficiently or not. I'm happy to compare and contrast older segments with newer ones. After all, I've heard good things about the story "Evolution Of Mice". I don't if that story will appeal to me in terms of genre, but I was like, "So this is that author. But Saturn Seven has potential so I'll give it another go.
Author's Response:
Right, I knew your name rang a bell.
My VPN stopped working because of a new router and I cannot access Deviantart (or facebook, youtube, google, you name it.) In the country I am currently in.
Very sorry for the inconvenience. You have answered my questions. I will get back to you on this matter as soon as I have normal internet again. I can't even access my Email-account right now.