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Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: November 29 2014 7:06 AM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense

Just a quickie: "In fact, his current appearance of spit-slogged debasement would probably prompt the girl to defend him even more ferociously to Maggie and set about cradling him in her warm palm, who no-doubt would descend into unstoppable giggles even as she willingly passed over her human chewing gum."

Either the "who" is misplaced or I have no idea how the pieces fit together; and now... NEXT CHAPTER FTW!

Author's Response:

You're right, it was just sloppy phrasing on my part. I've fixed it now.

Reviewer: randysavage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 22 2014 8:58 AM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense

This just keeps getting better and better!



Author's Response:

Thanks man.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 22 2014 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense

Maggie is making Carly proud wherever she is.



Author's Response:

There's no higher honor in my stories than the metaphorical approval of Carly.

Reviewer: MostKnownUnknowns Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 22 2014 1:14 AM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense

If the sister doesn't get shrunk by the mom at this point life has no meaning. Lol

Gone way beyond the curious. I think punishment is in order. Even worse for lying to the mothers face. Make it so please



Author's Response:

I'm sure my hinting has made it clear that Maggie WILL shrink eventually, just not in the immediate future. Hang on to life!

Reviewer: zephilia Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 21 2014 11:00 PM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense

Libs seems to be a welcom relief for Scott. However i donot think this will be the case. Again no mistakes in your writing. Truly a masterpiece in the works. I don't know why but Maggie seems to listen To Liby. I hopwe this doesn't effect how she treats Scott. Kepp up the great work. Cannot wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Libby actually is a decent person amidst a cast of maniacial women in Scott's life. You're right that Maggie listens to Libby, partially because she thinks it's funny that the latter has a crush on Scott, but also because she's good enough friends with her that she'll listen to what she says on occasion.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 21 2014 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense

Wow I've missed quite a bit lol. I'm actually intrigued by these developments. I'm patiently waiting for Judy to get back from her errands but none the less looking forward to what happens to Scott with Libby. Also the way Scott feels in the chapter is positively heartbreaking. Its almost like he's given up having a "normal" relationship with his sister. Maggie has finally broken him and made him hers.(wonder what Judy will think of that, maybe be proud lol)
I still think that his Ella meet/phone call is too good to be true, something's gonna happen to screw that up.. And that something might as well be Judy.
As far as Libby goes I dont remember much of her(was she the one at Maggie's soccer game). But she seems to mean well albeit a little jealous of Scott's girlfriend so maybe there will be some drama there..

All and all these last few chapters were great and I'm sorry I missed the live versions.

aaron
PS can't wait to see your writing when Judy comes back. Will Scott spill the beans(cause he's at the end of his rope) or will Judy discover Maggie's actions on her own? Or maybe it could somehow workout where Judy is eavesdropping on Scott's phone call to Ella and Maggie plays the whole thing aloof. That would be an interesting scenario, in my opinion.

Author's Response:

Good to hear your commentary again. You're right that there's been a certain kind of shift between Scott and Maggie here in their relationship. Scott's been fighting hard for that call to Ella, but he's been stabbed in the back many times before...

Reviewer: socksarecool Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 21 2014 10:39 AM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense

I wonder if Libby will turn to the "Dark Side"? Kind of hoping she doesn't since it seems like Scott is going to have to deal with Nancy and his Mother later.

I have a theory as to who Scott saw on the TV but I don't want to spoil it if I turn out to be correct. I'm also loving these fast updates for Watch Over and Time Out 6!



Author's Response:

Libby actually is what she appears to be on the surface, which is lucky for Scott.

Thanks for reviewing. I hope to keep up this pace!

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