[Report This]Date: August 17 2014 11:56 AM Title: Chapter 9: Between a soft place and a soft place.
Wow, what a creative chapter!
Two sets of lips from different women, and different places. Ass lips, and mouth lips. I love it!
As for Rick, its gotta be inside the ass of Nina. Tape him up until he looks like a mummy. Have two little slits so he can see his fate. Jessica then puts Rick in her mouth then she puts Rick in Nina's ass.
Its a bit of a stretch , but hopefully this idea brings up other ideas that you will use next chapter. I cant wait!
Author's Response:
I actually love the idea, it may get used or someting like it.
Date: August 14 2014 8:59 AM Title: Chapter 9: Between a soft place and a soft place.
Though not a ray of sunshine by any means, this story has certainly turned dark. I feel like this is going from something to help spice up and renew their marriage to her becoming a psychotic monster. You're walking a fine line at the moment. Much darker and it will turn me off this story. I'll be cautiously reading your future chapters.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your feeedback.I have made it obvious that it may effect what I release, and yours may do so, I don't enjoy the extreme violence when I read it either, and I consider what is happening with Rick violent yes, but extreme or a turn off to my tastes.
I understand that this story has morphed into something different than what it started as. Partly that is because I had no idea what I wanted it to initally be aside from a concept.
I also did not expect it to be this long and it may have benefitted from completing and a sequel coming of it that led to hear.
I am writing what comes to me. I will likely be ending this series of chapters soon and writing a sequel that caters towards what I have learned I enjoy writing through writing this.