[Report This]Date: August 17 2017 6:21 AM Title: Chapter 2
I don’t have the words to describe how amazing this is. I’ve only read to chapter two, but I am in awe of your work.
Normally “Alani” is the sort of character I have a hard time getting behind, the sort of character you want to shake and yell, “Wake up” at. But damn it, she breaks your heart in every scene.
The story is so rich, with so many layers of emotion. Every scene where she’s happy, there is an underlying layer of sadness. In fact, sometime when she’s joyous, it’s a reason for every person with heart to be pained. It give the narrative a depth and richness that is hard to match.
It’s pretty rare that I sympathize with a giantess, but you’ve made a huge underdog in her and my heart goes out to her. She is such a fresh point of view also, so focused on others, she brings the characters and situations into focus in a way you don’t usually see.
Of course, your dialogue does that too. It is also layered and revealing.
I’m not really sure of the world we are seeing yet, I’m not even sure we are on Earth. So my mind goes to the Firefly ‘Verse. But that’s just me. But some idea of the level of technology would be helpful, to understand what is possible.
Carl comes off as a bit of a stereotype. In real farm life, guys who are cruel to “animals” don’t last long and usually wind up working with people; where being an abusive ass is far more acceptable.
I’m not prepared to invest in Kenji as a character. Distant science types can wind up being the worst people. Or at least their consequences can be the worst. So, I’m not pinning any hopes on him. He is, after all, still someone using a slave. No matter how much she might see her circumstances as being improved, she is still subject to that disgraceful institution.
A story that seems so simple but is so though provoking...masterful work. I am probably going to be sad that there are only 5 chapters.
Peace
pix
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm always a bit surprised this story still gets reviews after being 'published' for so long. I often do not finish writing my stories. With Fyth, I vowed each story would be five chapters, so at least they reach some form of completion.
That being said, I'm tempted to write a sequel to this one. It'll probably be one of those things where the sequel is worse than the original, but I'm tempted nonetheless. Just haven't conceived of a good hook yet.
Carl is indeed a bit stereotypical. Kinda makes me happy to hear it! Stephen King never liked The Stand being his 'best' book, a book he published nearly 40 years ago. Similarly, most authors don't want to think they've already written their 'best'.
Thanks for the detailed review, pixl8ed!
[Report This]Date: September 05 2014 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 2
So far, this one of the best-written GTS stories ever. I'm rooting for the characters!
Author's Response:
Wow, that's high praise. Thanks, SmallFrye!
[Report This]Date: September 03 2014 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 2
Carl is obviously one of those sadistic p---ks who thinks "discipline" and "torture" are two different names for the same thing.
Author's Response:
Have to agree with you on that one!
[Report This]Date: September 01 2014 11:03 PM Title: Chapter 2
Golden. Original. Well written. Great character development.
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks!
[Report This]Date: September 01 2014 8:23 PM Title: Chapter 2
Well, it looks like Kenji is about to screw everything up! Fugly's gonna start thinking better 'bout herself, and her looks, and then what...
She might start thinking for herself, then the humans won't be able to control her as easily. She'll soon realize that she doesn't have to listen to the little pip squeaks anymore, and she could just squish 'em, like little bugs!
(Carl's thoughts, as he tips back the rest of his boot-leg and stumbles on home)
Author's Response:
Lol, I was upset until I read your last line. Haha. Nice one.
[Report This]Date: September 01 2014 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 2
Seems Alani doesn't know how beautiful she really is but when you've got people like Carl who call her names and put down her looks and being looked at with great disgust then it's no surprise. Those who noticed she has a child like innocence are right, she assumes that Carl is always truthful even he isn't and assumed he was watching her carry rocks when we all know he was looking at Alani's chest.
It would seem that nudity is no issue to Fyths and they are really thought of poorly by humans, if Carl and Brandon are anything to go by and her own thoughts seem to echo it. She has really low self esteem but Kenji might be able to raise it.
I am starting to like Kenji, the way he handled Carl was awesome and I had thought you would have this subplot with Kenji being led on by Carl that Alani was a bad worker but you had Kenji see right through it with ease, well done!
However the smile Carl had as he left is unsettling, he'll be back to cause trouble for sure. I can see it easily.
Lyric is a bundle of joy as always and somewhere underneath that hard exterior of Kenji is a far softer side of him that needs some loving, I just get this feel about him. That 25 minute swim is going to be a lot longer now.
Did you get this idea about doing the reverse of Titan?
Author's Response:
It's funny you mention 'reverse of Titan'. Initially I was thinking 'reverse giantess', a giantess with no control. But there are some similarities to Titan since a 'slave' relationship isn't much worse than a 'pet' relationship.
I think that the Fyth phsiological and mental differences are a bit more extreme -- more will be revealed on that later. Titans and humans are pretty similar in those aspects. But, then again, humans that were bred as 'pets' in Titan universe showed vast intellectual differences from Titans. Needless to say, Titan has influenced my work and that will probably always be the case, given how much I enjoyed reading stories in that universe. The only reason I stopped reading Titan was because of Luke and Aisell. If they ever get back together, someone please notify me. I'll have a lot of back reading to do. If they don't, I'll continue to weep in private (I'll probably do the back reading anyway, lol, when I get time...but I'll still cry for my favorite couple).
[Report This]Date: September 01 2014 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 2
HEY!!! This is pretty good.
Author's Response:
Well, thanks! I'm happy you're enjoying it.
Date: September 01 2014 3:18 PM Title: Chapter 2
As an old friend of mine would say, whirrrrou!
Loving the story, and (knowing your style), waiting for what form of inevitable comeuppance Carl will receive. Hopefully something utterly humiliating.
Alani has a similar thought-wording to quite a few child characters, which implies that she isn't inherently stupid, just uneducated- in fact, I'd say her ability to adapt so well to change and forgive easily shows that she has the potential to be extremely intelligent. In fact, I hope she begins learning to read or something. (Don't mind this paragraph, just me being pointlessly speculative).
All in all, a great read, and I can't wait for Chapter 3.
Author's Response:
One or more of your predictions may come to pass. :) Thanks for the review.
Date: September 01 2014 2:28 PM Title: Chapter 2
Alani is so cute! I really liked the chapter, I hope that jerkwad Carl gets canned!
Author's Response:
She is, isn't she. Let's hope Carl's attitude has been adjusted since Kenji had a word with him.
[Report This]Date: September 01 2014 1:39 PM Title: Chapter 2
These first two chapters hit me right in the feels.....Stop doing that.
Author's Response:
Life on a farm has its ups and downs. Good to see you again and thanks for the vote!
For without pain, there can be no pleasure. Without sadness, there can be no happiness. Without misery there can be no beauty.- Harlan Ellison