[Report This]Date: September 08 2014 7:26 AM Title: Chapter 3
Will "absinthe" make her heart grow fonder?*
*Oh, stop groaning! You _know_ that pun was inevitable.
Author's Response:
*Makes mental note to avoid all words that might tempt a pun* ;)
Date: September 06 2014 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 3
This story is awesome, can't wait to read the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks, Dante! More coming soon.
Date: September 06 2014 11:00 AM Title: Chapter 3
:3
Author's Response:
Good to hear from you again. :)
[Report This]Date: September 06 2014 9:58 AM Title: Chapter 3
Yeah, there's a whole lot of smut-storys on the web, but 'Quality-Smut' is really something that's missing lately,
... seems like there used to be a few storys that were 'well written' and they, just skimmed the surface, of crossing from 'R' to 'X'. That seems to be a thing that's just not done anymore. It's either 'Hardcore', or 'G' rated...
I would have figured that you were avoiding the 'naughty' side, just to see if the story could stand on it's own; without adding anything 'smutty' into the recipe. Your ability to create, sometimes amaze's me. You make it look so easy, yet,... I know that you've put some time into the structure of this story.
It will surprise me, if nothing bad happens to Alani. You have portrayed her as this kind-hearted angelic giantess, and she seems to be so giving, (to the point of self sacrifice), I would predict that she'll have some sort of 'Disaster' happen, and she'll need someone to help her...
And, I predict, that Carl will most likely be the culprit?
Ha! Sorry, I just got tired of leaving short reviews!
Author's Response:
Interesting predictions. :)
[Report This]Date: September 06 2014 6:53 AM Title: Chapter 3
Sounds like that green stuff is the verdant equivalent of moonshine.
Author's Response:
Or absinthe. ;)
Good thing it doesn't make Alani drunk. That wouldn't be pretty.
[Report This]Date: September 05 2014 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 3
The Childhhood innocents, is so fascinating from this perspective. Alana being such a loving indivigual, and the little girl so trusting of her...
Great Stuff!
Carl's got some beer money now. Maybe he'll take his new friend out for a drink?
They could maybe go a catch a movie at the drive-in!
'Attack of the Fifty Foot Farmhand' ;)
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Just wondering, why did you stop writing the naughty stuff?
Author's Response:
Several reasons. So much of the web is devoted to 'naughty stuff'; I don't see a need to add more. That being said, I'll likely write R-rated material in the future, occassionally, for the sake of realism. Thanks for the review!
Date: September 05 2014 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 3
*points at chapter* CALLED IT!
Ahem. Anyway, I am beginning to feel a little sorry for Alani. At this point it's obvious that she's self-deprecating to the point of holding herself back, and that just . . . reminds me of a friend of mine. I just can't seem to build him up because of how long he's been put down by everyone. He's attempted suicide a few times, he's completely convinced he's utterly worthless, but he's one of the few people I will outright admit is smarter than me. He's creative, talented, and it just hurts seeing him tear himself apart. Alani reminding me of him hurts, because I feel powerless to help.
Now that I've spilled my guts to the Internet, I have to comment on the other elephant in the room: Carl is getting built up as a manipulative asshole, which means that you're going to drop the karma hammer hard.
Can't wait for Chapter 4.
Author's Response:
Lol. I suppose it's somewhat cliche that Alani is illiterate. However, literacy is still a major problem (25% of children in America grow up never learning to read). Not that I'm trying to make a political statement. :)
As for your friend, it sounds like he's depressed. I think that for many people, depression simply doesn't have a 'cure'. I see how you feel powerless. And you're right; you can't fix his problem. However you help simply by being there as a friend. He's shared all that personal info with you, and you still haven't abandoned him; that's what matters.
Sometimes depressed people withdraw. It's hard for them to be around others when in a dark mood (not all the time but sometimes). Other times they don't want to be alone, so it's good you're there as a friend for those times. These opinions are from my own experience since I was diagnosed many years ago (depression affects an estimated 10% of Americans). Take what I say with a grain of salt. Since my diagnosis, I've gotten a lot better, but it's still an illness that can be difficult (sometimes impossible) to shake entirely.
As for Carl, we'll have to see what happens. :)
[Report This]Date: September 05 2014 3:08 PM Title: Chapter 3
Amazing, loved this chapter! And poor Alani is gonna go humgry for a week just to make a "friend" outta an asswipe like Carl!
Author's Response:
Thanks! As for Alani, she does seem way too trusting.