[Report This]Date: November 29 2014 8:16 PM Title: Spell 1 - A Whimsical Meeting
Great introduction and first chapter! I was skeptical about the theme, but this looks like a great adventure story! I'm intrigued!
That said... On to reading the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading! I'm more comfortable writing fantasy stories, so I chose to write a gts story in that genre :) Hope it holds water for you!
Date: November 23 2014 9:55 AM Title: Spell 1 - A Whimsical Meeting
For an incomplete chapter the cliffhanger you left really shocked me. Is it the sound of John's body breaking or has someone intervened to save our poor human?
Glad to see you updating, a little more than a week before I can start writing again!
Author's Response:
John's merely had a career change; from mage attendant to footwear :)
I've been busy throughout the month, but I do occasionally find time to write during my daily commute. Though, even then, I've been distracted by worksheets or my 3DS at times, so I don't write as often as I could :s Next chapter will have to come later than sooner I'm afraid, but I haven't abandoned writing them yet :) Looking forward to your update too!
Date: October 19 2014 8:55 AM Title: Spell 1 - A Whimsical Meeting
Maybe pampered is the best word, she does not come across as spoiled but being the baby of the family has left her sheltered from a lot of the realities of the world.
Author's Response:
Yup :) Baby's gotta face the world now, though!
Date: October 19 2014 6:46 AM Title: Spell 1 - A Whimsical Meeting
Thayna strikes me as a little naive but I guess this is part and parcel of growing up, you got to learn that the world is a dark and scary place. Curious to see where John will go with this.
I am not against romance between John and Thayna or it could be someone else in the mix but either way you're making it very interesting.
Author's Response:
She's a spoiled girl, haha :p Most affairs in Farum are left to her other family members, since her magic was weak at the time, so she's really been pampered when it came to responsibility. Now that she's left, though, she'll need to learn, and fast!
[Report This]Date: September 28 2014 10:24 AM Title: Spell 1 - A Whimsical Meeting
SoleEmbrace, this is a very cool story that you've got going here, and I'm enjoying it very much. The world you've built is quite captivating, and it's clear to see that you enjoy that sort of thing. More importantly, the characters are likable and multi-faceted. I can tell I really like a character when I think about him/her during the day when I'm just out and about, and that definitely holds true for your characters.
There's not much to criticize, but one minor thing I noticed was a bit of minor inconsistency with the dialogue. I think a character even mentioned it in an earlier chapter: basically, the dialogue seems to go back and forth between the medieval, stilted style and more modern, easy-going language. It's not a big deal, but it is something that sort of took me out of the story at times.
Either way, the story is still excellent. The premise is very cool, and it just so happens to line up well with the things I like (fantasy stories and hot foot action). Looking forward to more!
Author's Response:
Thank you, Casanova! I have to admit, the change in tone went right over my head when I did my proofreading. Just goes to show you should never just read through sentence by sentence while editing! Thanks for pointing it out! And glad you enjoyed my story!
[Report This]Date: September 26 2014 7:39 PM Title: Spell 1 - A Whimsical Meeting
Your answer is completely satisfactory and totally makes sense to me. Thanks.
Author's Response:
Glad to hear it :) See you next chapter!
Date: September 25 2014 1:10 PM Title: Spell 1 - A Whimsical Meeting
I like this latest chapter, it adds humanity to the giantesses who apart from Thayna seemed a little one dimensional. Good move on your part, looking forward to seeing more from you, my fellow countryman!
Author's Response:
Thanks Nostory :) I'm having fun reading your new story as well, so let's both keep at it~
Date: September 20 2014 8:26 AM Title: Spell 1 - A Whimsical Meeting
That's cool to know. Who woulda thought I'd meet another Singaporean here.
Date: September 15 2014 5:36 AM Title: Spell 1 - A Whimsical Meeting
Nice job so far. I like giantess stories in a fantasy setting. But you said Tharsia caught several people under her foot. If she's fifty feet tall than according to the Giantess converter, her foot would be 7.4 feet long and 2.6 feet wide. So how could she catch several people underfoot? Unless she did it one at a time.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading :) The villagers were huddled together closely, so Tharsia could easily catch a few of them at once!
[Report This]Date: September 14 2014 11:56 AM Title: Spell 1 - A Whimsical Meeting
I like this. It seems really fun and interesting. I'll definitely be following this one.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading! It was fun to write for too, please look forward to it!
[Report This]Date: September 14 2014 7:50 AM Title: Spell 1 - A Whimsical Meeting
Seems fun and I like what you've done here, can't wait to see what else you've got planned! Thayna seems to be gentle but mischievous enough to make you fear for your own safety.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading! I was having trouble wiritng for Madison in GDD, what with how stiff she can be sometimes, so I throught I'd write a feisty, mischievous girl like Thayna. Should be fun :)