[Report This]Date: October 21 2014 4:07 PM Title: Thunder and Lightning
Dustin sure lives dangerously.
[Report This]Date: October 17 2014 2:13 PM Title: Thunder and Lightning
Excellent chapter, never would have thought that Justin being honest about his infidelity could result in anything other than his death and instead it might just have save the world.
Really given her personality being in flux almost anything could happen next chapter should she survive, and there's the very real possibility she didn't. Either way looking forward to seeing how this ends.
[Report This]Date: October 17 2014 8:14 AM Title: Thunder and Lightning
Excent work as always - my only criticisim? The continuity problem, where he is trapped between her toes, she lifts her feet into the air and then he comforts her by touching her lips. Thats one hell of a contortion for her to reach (or he has a super long pinky! :) )
Author's Response:
She starts crying and brings him down before that, balling around him like when they slept in 'Awakening'
[Report This]Date: October 17 2014 6:21 AM Title: Thunder and Lightning
Spectacular chapter. I'm looking forward to see what we will see next. Would be neat if she somehow finds Melissa and knows who she is and what she did. I think that would make for an interesting situation considering she's changed(which I'm assuming she has). Wonder what will happen if the bomb has no effect on her? Will that trigger her bloodlust once again? I'm looking forward to the last chapter(kinda sad ita ending) but I wish she could somehow reunite with either her parents or Dustin's.
aaron
PS nice touch not having her kill Dustin. I like this human Jessica.
[Report This]Date: October 16 2014 9:19 PM Title: Thunder and Lightning
I dont know how shes supposed to make up for all the people shes killed at this point but Im glad at least shes trying to repent a little and feels bad about what shes done. I will be pleasantly surprised if you dont end the story with her death or her surviving and going evil again.
To me those two endings are the easiest and most generic ways this story could end. But considering you only have a chapter left to end this i cant see this ending any other way. Whatever you choose i hope you give it a long chapter, this story was great and deserves a proper ending that doesnt feel rushed!
Date: October 16 2014 8:09 PM Title: Thunder and Lightning
Think she'll still die, quite a rollercoaster chapter and honestly, fits Jessica's current personality. It's too late, saving one tunnnel of people won't undo the damage she has done and frankly, unless Michael and Dustin can convince the commander to hold off the missile.
Dustin will probably die if he isn't running for his life now.