Reviews For Marvin and Jeff.
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Reviewer: neorodent Signed star [Report This]
Date: October 04 2014 2:55 PM Title: How it started.

I realize there is now a generation that learned to write via text messaging, but real cogent writing requires paragraphs.  A series of disconnected sentences can not make a convincing scene and it doesn't flow.  



Author's Response:

Thanks for the response.  

Reviewer: stargate1990 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 03 2014 11:25 AM Title: How it started.

I really like the idea of this story.  I just wish your characters wern't so old.  I love the fact that he expects his gf!  Wonderful story, only complaint is the older men but that's a personal prefrence.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the positive feedback.  I am not a Profi writer, just doing it as a hobby.  Hugs Form me...

Reviewer: lazyb Signed [Report This]
Date: October 03 2014 3:56 AM Title: How it started.

Am writing now a new chapter.  Will try and post it anew every day!  Thanks for the comment.  Keep 'em comming!!! Don't forget the rating, please! I liked your doll-house story too!  Very erotic, with enough fun for the whole family !! Keep up the good work.

Curtis

Reviewer: realRS Signed [Report This]
Date: October 02 2014 3:30 PM Title: How it started.

Looking forward to seeing where it goes

Author's Response:

Thank you.  Am working on it.  I liked your doll house story too.  I certainly am not able to write like that.  Thank you very mich. Curtis

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