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Reviewer: LittlestGuy Signed [Report This]
Date: December 20 2014 1:27 PM Title: Chapter 1

I am really liking the different places he is ending up. The kleenex and spit jar were good ideas. 

Reviewer: julieshrink Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 13 2014 11:02 AM Title: Chapter 5

Very good!

continues the story with more photos...

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 10 2014 4:20 AM Title: Chapter 1

Once again, you are very creative! In fact, I think you are the first one that I have seen write about a tiny man tied to a woman's tongue.

I also liked how you started with the mouth and moved down Shynia's body one body part at a time.

Wouldn't Shynia feel Tom when they kissed? I guess their tongues came into contact often in that kiss, and I think Shynia should've recognized that something was up with Emily's tongue.

So Emily is leaving Tom with Shynia? Did I hear that right? Well, that's interesting. And if Shynia is gonna use Tom as gum, Emily has to disguise him or cover him up that he looks like gum.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Very solid point about Shynia should have been able to feel Tom. I guess we'll have to chalk this up to Shynia being drunk and not realizing anything weird about the situation. Also, no, Shynia will not be using Tom as gum (cans filled with chewers spit are one of the most disgusting things on this world. Also there would be no way Shynia wouldn't notice it wasn't gum, let alone a way Tom would survive being chewed up). I guess you'll just have to wait until my next chapter to see exactly where I go with this! Thanks for the review and the constructive criticism! -Author56

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: December 03 2014 2:54 AM Title: Chapter 4

Hmmm. I'm thinking of a skinny brunette.

Unaware, huh. Well, that changes everything. I'm guess is that Emily tapes Tom up like a mummy and inserts him into the other girl.

Then at the end, Emily just leaves Tom inside the other girl, then both girls do various activities(yoga, shopping, dancing) while Tom is stuck inside the new girl.

(Just a guess.)

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Author56 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 03 2014 12:57 AM Title: Chapter 1

Sorry for not clarifying this more carefully; the girl that Emily and Tom will be with will be completely unaware of shrunken Tom. I am looking for physical descriptions you'd like to see (Fat,tall,skinny,brown hair, etc.). Also if anyone shouts out a name I'll be more than willing to use that. Expect my next chapter to be out Monday.

Reviewer: Footsteps Signed [Report This]
Date: December 02 2014 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 1

Wonderfully well done! Since you ask, I'd like to see the girl possibly be an ex girlfriend or former co worker of his. You may consider this to be too coincidental, but It would be nice and humiliating for him!

As far as her personality, at least in the next chapter goes, I'd like it if she is very hesitant to use him but Emily convinces her that it's what he is there for , and the girl slowly comes around and starts to love it

Reviewer: Footsteps Signed [Report This]
Date: December 02 2014 6:40 AM Title: Chapter 1

Wonderfully well done! Since you ask, I'd like to see the girl possibly be an ex girlfriend or former co worker of his. You may consider this to be too coincidental, but It would be nice and humiliating for him!

As far as her personality, at least in the next chapter goes, I'd like it if she is very hesitant to use him but Emily convinces her that it's what he is there for , and the girl slowly comes around and starts to love it

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 02 2014 2:22 AM Title: Chapter 4

First of all, that's a nice picture.

Second, I want the other girl to be similar to Emily. A sadistic, creative girl who likes taping up Tom and inserting him inside her.

You did a great job with Emily so I'm not sure what else I'm looking for in this other girl.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 28 2014 12:56 PM Title: Chapter 3

Wow, you are very creative!

Using snot as a prison! String plus tape to trap him! These are great examples of entrapment, including trapping him against her vagina.

It's like you are a fan of bondage or something. I think that's awesome, becuase it reminds him how much of a slave he really is.

Looking forward to his next adventure in his torture reality. Very entertaining story.

Reviewer: LittlestGuy Signed [Report This]
Date: November 27 2014 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 3

Been a great story so far. well written. 

Reviewer: tritty Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 25 2014 1:29 PM Title: Chapter 1

This looks like it's going to be a fun story. You have a good balance of action with a little bit of narrative progession. Keep it up!

Reviewer: Mr E Signed [Report This]
Date: November 25 2014 10:30 AM Title: Chapter 1

you didnt hold back, she seems like she's very cruel from the end of chapter 2 and I bet it's only going to get worse. I'll be following this story to see where it goes and so far it seems like its only going to get more interesting.

Reviewer: Footsteps Signed [Report This]
Date: November 25 2014 12:02 AM Title: Chapter 1

I really like where this story is going, and it's written quite well. Keep it up!

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