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Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: February 24 2015 11:48 PM Title: Chapter 10: The Solution and The Insight

Glad to see an update, I was beginning to worry this story was getting shafted...



Author's Response:

Nope, just been balls to the wall busy. Thanks for your patience.

Reviewer: Hank the Boggle Champion Signed [Report This]
Date: February 22 2015 3:39 PM Title: Chapter 1: On The Trail and A Royal Audience

You should continue this story,mate. You should check out my story the legend of Julius Marius and the hunt for el lobo. It is along the same violent and sadisitic line as this one. I like the whole badass killer persona as he struggles to change. Write more bruhhhhh....

Author's Response: Bruuuuuh. This story's already written bruuuuuh. BRUUuUuUuUuUuUUUUUUH

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: January 30 2015 10:16 AM Title: Chapter 1: On The Trail and A Royal Audience

I'd love to see a new story from you, this one, even though it was written years ago is just too good to not see another one. I don't necessarily mean a Matt and Amelia tale but anything from you. 

Have you considered that?



Author's Response: NO Yes, I have, in fact. I've been in a writing kick lately, and I've hammered out the outline of a story I really really really like, which I have the first chapter of like 3 or 4 written. It's a shrunken man story, but its heavy on the lovey dovey mucky fucky stuff. But, I think you'll dig it. My situation is a pretty hot mess right now, so I'm gonna fuck off for about a week or so, but thanks for your patience, mate.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 29 2015 3:17 PM Title: Chapter 9: Vagabond Act Two

Matt kinda came off as a dick in this chapter, but she WAS being a little unreasonable. I mean its not like Matt was just killing those guys just because, they were going to kill him and Amelia, what could he have done?

Also did Amelia just say that she's seen humans killed before? And did she just justify it by comparing sentient beings like humans being eaten to animals like deer being eaten? Little iffy on that, I don't think thats the same thing.

I mean if deers could talk back or reason with humans I have little doubt that we stop eating them. I don't think many people could stomach the prospect of eating something that could talk back...

Anyway, overall it was a good chapter. In summary, Amelia was being unreasonable and Matt was kinda being a prick.



Author's Response:

I think i was going for how naive amelia is, and the prospect of matt being this really efficient murderstabbydeath machine kind of scares her. As far as deer compared to humans, I dont necessarily disagree with you, but look at it from her perspective- she comes from a culture that has no problem with eating this animals that look exactly like them, just scaled down. Her comparing it to a human eating a deer is her searching for a simile, id think. Also, people have eaten people for a long while in our world. nature supes cray cray bruh. Anyways, thanks for reading. I enjoy your input.

Reviewer: Cloud Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29 2015 10:42 AM Title: Chapter 9: Vagabond Act Two

Ugh, necessary whiney Bitch mode for story drama and progression enabled :I



Author's Response:

"Mattie i really love you even though I've known you for like half a week"

"no amelia i am kill"

"matt no"

*cry*

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 28 2015 5:03 PM Title: Chapter 1: On The Trail and A Royal Audience

Good stuff! Drunk Amelia is a bit more naughty isn't she?



Author's Response:

shes definitely a happy drunk, that's for sure. So, i went full nerd while writing this, and I wanted to find out how drunk exactly amelia was. When doing this calculation, i made a few pretty big assumptions: 1. Alcohol behaves the same way in giants as it does in human-sized folk, on a molecular scale. 2. giant physiology is nearly the same as human. 

I started with a BAC calculator i found on the internet, which measured number of glasses of alcohol and accounted for weight, sex, and time drinking. We know for sure a few things- Amelia is slim (for her size), so I put her, were she to step on a scale adapted for giant usage, 135 lbs. Now, we know she had a bottle of mead plus a couple of drinks when she woke up. So, we'll put that at 8 125ml glasses of mead. Mead has a similar alcohol content to wine, about 15%, or 30proof. So: 8 glasses of mead at 30 proof in 8 hours would put her BAC% at about .133. According to the BAC chart, she would be 'Drunk: "high" reduced and depressive effects (anxiety/unease) more pronounced, gross motor impairment, judgment and perception severely impaired.' In other words, had Amelia gotten behind the wheel at .133, she would have driven all over the forest and probably would have crashed i into rocky falls. 

Do they have a giant-sized Designated Driver program?

More interestingly, if we did the same calculation for her first drinking binge, about 6 cups of mead in the space of about an hour (making an assumtion here, of course), that would have put her BAC at about .185. "Dazed and confused: gross disorientation to time and place, increased nausea and vomiting, may need assistance to walk/stand, impervious to pain, blackout likely."

it's a wonder how she got to her bed after that. 

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 28 2015 2:51 AM Title: Chapter 6: Duel Tales

Oh and the song was fairly well written too. I kinda sang it in my head and I liked that it rhymed, I hate it when songs don't have rhyming!



Author's Response:

I truly wish i could take credit for that tune, but i cannot. It's a real live song. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_3_S1Q40HZo

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 28 2015 2:49 AM Title: Chapter 6: Duel Tales

Wait. Don't do what ever again? It was a dream wasn't it? Is she talking about the dream where Matt killed her or the arrow he shot her with before? Also I'm gonna say it: it feels like they are falling for eachother rather quickly.

Maybe Amelia makes a bit more sense since she likes humans and Matthew seems to be the rare human that can be friends with her despite being giant. Also she feels like the type of person that can get overly attached to something quickly.

But Matthew has some deep-seeded hatred for giants. I guess the story hasn't exactly made it 100% certain whether Mathew loves her back or only sees her as a friend/acquaintance yet...Amelia though, jumped the gun pretty quick!

Great chapter either way though!



Author's Response:

yeah- matt says im sorry becuase amelia just got out of that very (for her) vivid dream. And yes, looking back, i do as well think that they fall for each other pretty quick- matts in denial, i think, though. Yeah, that pretty much sums up amelia- I dont regret writing her that way, but I do try and make her grow (haha did u c wut i did there m8) personality-wise in the next story (Matt and Amelia 2: Electric Boogaloo) and in the next piece i'm writing (which will not be posted on here because there is next ot no giantess content). anyway, thanks for reading.

Reviewer: Cloud Signed [Report This]
Date: January 27 2015 10:01 PM Title: Chapter 4: Getting to Know You

Not a big baseball fan, I like the genre of story you're writing in, gentle/loyal is something I can dig. I like the lines that this chapter is going along, what with the in-depth character write up, and his reassurance that he's a killer. I look forward to your chapters.



Author's Response:

Thanks! The matt being a killer thing is something i'll harp on a bit later. Thank you for the review, and im glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 27 2015 2:37 PM Title: Chapter 4: Getting to Know You

Dude, you KNOW this story isnt bad...its not the best thing i have ever read but its pretty good, if a little cliche so far 



Author's Response:

man how boring would not being cheesy be though for reals. thanks for the kind words.

Reviewer: Cloud Signed [Report This]
Date: January 27 2015 5:25 AM Title: Chapter 3: Captured and Her Name Is...

You don't usually hear your skin ripping, often times it's felt. Uh, also, I felt his acceptance of her/his pity was too fast and forthcoming, seeing as his village was destroyed, likely family killed too, by giants.



Author's Response:

fair enough. 

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 27 2015 12:19 AM Title: Chapter 3: Captured and Her Name Is...

So far, this story is amazing! I really changed my opinion of this story big-time from the first chapter. This even reminds me of some of Pixis early works...

But to be completely honest, that first chapter does this story a disservice. It looks like a quick paragraph 1st chapter of a story that someone writes to mind vent and is probably gonna abandon shortly after.

No joke, I was THIS close to putting this story on my 'why bother' list after that first chapter... Its not that it's badly written, it's that its short and doenst really hook my attention.

If you don't introduce your giantess in the first chapter then I think having a lot of 'nothing' happening is probably the worst thing you can do. And in that chapter, besides being introduced to the protagonist and getting the knowledge that hes on the hunt nothing interesting happens.

In my opinion, you should either re-write it, to make it more interesting, or combine it with chapter 2. Hope this helps, overall this is a great story so far and it'd be a shame if more people were offput by the 'meh' first chapter!



Author's Response:

I dig what youre saying. i combined the first two chapters for the sake of this run-through. I'm really glad you like it- the idea of a gentle giantess in medieval setting was something i got from Pixis. In fact, we collaborated on the sequel of this story. I'll probably post that in the future. it's about 5 times long in its entirety. this is 50ish pages long in MS word.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2015 11:25 PM Title: Chapter 1: On The Trail and A Royal Audience

Great! Alot more info was given here and it was long enough to not feel like a paragraph! Good stuff, also that king needs an arrow to the forehead!



Author's Response:

yey

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