[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 4:35 PM Title: Chapter 1a - Alex and Elise
Love this new update! By the way I am so excited you have decided to write about Amazonian women as I believe that specific height range maximizes contact. If they get over 50 ft contact becomes limited and normal sex is nearly impossible. At least for Amazons they can still have normal sex. Also I am glad you have delved into the personalities and wold of the characters, shows you have really put some thought into this. And thank you for writing a gentle love story as I am a sucker for these types of stories. I get tired of the mindless violence of giantesses crushing and killing people. Again, great job on this story, can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
Thanks, I appreciate the feedback. I agree with your thoughts. As you said, I feel the Amazon size gives you maximum compatibility between partners. Still enough to turn the power dynamic on its head, but not so much that I would struggle to understand how the characters could cuddle and hold hands (in any meaningful way). That's not to say there aren't a lot of great stories on here with more pronounced size differences though. On the contrary, this site is loaded with them. I'm always amazed at the creativity that allows some of those relationships to work. I just find it difficult to write.
Gentle stories have always been my preference as well. I find it compelling when a loving character doesn't act the way you might expect, or perhaps the way their lover expects.
Date: June 10 2015 10:44 PM Title: Chapter 1a - Alex and Elise
I can imagine Jason's girlfriend might not be so horny since he is not infected like Alex, it will be good to see how the couples interact.
I notice you mentioned you're an engineer by profession and I thought I was the only engineer here( well my degree will be in engineering), I've always found it hard to get the flow some of the other writers here get with ease.
Author's Response:
Yes, I was in aerospace, but I'm more focused on systems engineering/program management now.
As you said, I am amazed by the ease with which others here seem to be able to pen their stories. For me, the greatest struggle isn't necessarily coming up with dialogue or setting, but keeping the detail at a high enough level. I guess it's the engineer in me...
Date: June 10 2015 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 7 - Love?
Beautiful confession of feelings there and I really want to see how the new couple acts around others and also how other couples involving a non-infected male behave, Elise can barely keep her hands off Alex as it is, is it the same for other infected women and their men too?
You keep it interesting enough.
Author's Response:
My intent is to portray infected women as having a pre-existing personality that may range from reserved to very forward, then overlay it with a kind of sexual addiction (again, of varying intensity). I don't believe they would throw all social decorum to the wind and satiate their desires no matter what the situation, but in the right cicumstances...
The dynamics between an infected female and a normal male and two infected are likely to be different too, so we could see some differences in Jason and his girlfriend.
[Report This]Date: June 10 2015 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 5 - A Visitor at School
This can't possibly be your first work. You're a skilled writer. After the first chapter, I'd read the story to completion because of the promises made to the reader alone. However, the simplicity and artistry of the writing itself came as quite a surprise.
The mechanics involved (sexual growth, virus, pheromones, etc) utilized in a way that doesn't overpower character development, which is good. Although the story is X rated, you don't make it a complete orgy -- also good. I like the character perspectives and less-sexual side of the story too.
I also like how you sprinkle in some world building and mechanics a little at a time...to much too fast and it's like reading an encyclopedia, so congrats on your approach. Keep writing!
Author's Response:
Hey thanks! Your story, Luna's Ascension, is one of my all-time favorites, so that really means a lot coming from you. I do enjoy the racy scenes, if only because I feel its one area where you can give almost limitless depth and texture to a sequence and still have decent writing. I know it's a bit taboo to be overly descriptive, but I think it can work for sex scenes to really transport the reader to the world you're building in that moment.
Still, I have a lot of flaws, and I'm learning as I go. I'm an engineer by profession, and I occasionally do technical writing at work, but nothing at all like this (of course!). So yes, it's my first story.
Thank you again for your feedback. I feel like I just got a pat on the back from one of the greats. There are so many fantastic writers here. It's a bit daunting to stand your work up next to theirs.
Date: June 09 2015 10:46 PM Title: Chapter 6 - Confrontation
Wow he got off scot free. I kinda see what you are doing here with the gender roles. She thinks Alex is just an weak easily manipulated small "man" lol. Its working pretty well, I wonder how things will go with Ash in the future though. Elise forgave Alex, but I feel like if she ran into Ash without him there she would beat her to the ground.
Author's Response:
Yeah I did a rewrite that hopefully flows a little better and didn't make his sins feel quite so egregious. They still are to us, of course, but things are not the same for the infected since gender dynamics are so different from ours.
Thanks for the feedback! Always nice to know how other people interpret the story.
Date: June 09 2015 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 1a - Alex and Elise
Elise was quick to forgive and also we learned a bit about how some of those affected by the virus may see men, she can't be the only one to feel that way.
Author's Response:
I would think not, indeed :)
Date: June 06 2015 1:42 PM Title: Chapter 5 - A Visitor at School
I hope Elise is as understand as she said she would be! And hopefully ash won't try to make things worse!
Date: June 06 2015 10:10 AM Title: Chapter 5 - A Visitor at School
Tension, so much tension the moment Elise showed up! I feel horrible for our young lovers, being forced into such situations.
Date: June 05 2015 8:24 AM Title: Chapter 1a - Alex and Elise
Thanks for the compliments but I don't consider myself a master. Not yet, I have much to learn and improve on.
I understand that sometimes good stories die because the author feels its bad because no one gives feedback, no one comments and you sort of just give up. Yeah I know the feeling, got really bad about a year ago.
So if I see something I like, I will review it so the author knows he is on the right track.
Oh and glad to hear your wife liked it and great to hear that the marriage has lasted 10 years.
Date: June 04 2015 11:03 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Mom
The chapter was nice, but your beginning comment was glorious. At first I was quickly horrified she'd make you stop, but now it's just a little funny how cliche it sounds.
[Report This]Date: June 04 2015 10:55 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Mom
You sound like a lucky man to have married a wonderfull woman and have her discover your fetish later and embrace it. I love how you've described the characters so far in this story. Intrigued how you plan to introduce conflict later on since you've engaged your main characters in a relationship so early.
Author's Response:
I couldn't agree more. I hate to say it, but I think this has taken our relationship to a new level of depth. Been married for 10 years and we're still exploring each other's passions. It doesn't hurt that she's really into it.
I have conflict planned, yes. I don't believe in the forced drama for the sake of drama. It's just too easy and I feel it's true to life that young people in lust or love would get together instead of sitting on their hands. Hopefully their experiences will cement their relationship, not spoil it.
Date: June 03 2015 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Mom
Beautiful stuff and with good plot development AND world building with the character's constantly updating on us how the world is affecting them!
Author's Response:
Nostory, thanks so much for faithfully responding. I'm sure you understand better than most that the its the feedback that makes the difference betweeen writing your own story in a .doc file never to see the light of day and a story that lives and breathes.
I bow before a master. Reading more of your material and providing feedback is high on my list of priorities. If I had time recently to read as well as write, I would have done it already. Regardless, I am grateful for your words.
[Report This]Date: May 31 2015 2:28 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Romance
Awesome story. I love the how it started and i feel connected with the characters.
Date: May 30 2015 3:32 PM Title: Chapter 1a - Alex and Elise
Great job! Looking forward to more chapters.
Date: May 30 2015 10:25 AM Title: Chapter 3 - Romance
Brilliant, the chapter isn't unimportant, it captures a lot of the emotions our characters feel and fleshes them out. I believe every chapter is important or at least should be, even sexy time can be used to develop the story along.
Plus we know now that the virus seems to impart a strong protective instinct towards the female infected when the object of their affection is under threat.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm really glad you found it helpful. Romance is something of a guilty pleasure for me as a guy, but I feel that I'm not very good at writing a woman's POV. I tried to make an effort here though. The next several chapters will not be quite so sappy, but who knows what will happen with Alex and Elise.
Date: May 30 2015 3:30 AM Title: Chapter 3 - Romance
Ah~, to see your story resurface is a thing of beauty only overshadowed by this chapter. As I've said previously, I find your writing to be excellently done, and that I very much enjoy your main characters. Elise and Alex are simply love incarnate, and I think very highly of you for doing a well done romance scene. I also found the chapter to be somewhat reminiscent of the story, "Balancing of the Sexs", in the way of their attractions to others, and the dismisal that they place on one lover only. I hope your story stays in the mainstream until my selfishly dire-need to read it has been quelled.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your comment! I'm unworthy of such praise, but I'm very happy folks are enjoying the story. I do plan to be a bit more active here in releasing updates than I was after the first. To be honest, it was a rather nice feedback email sent to me from a forum member that prompted me to get my butt in gear and continue with the story. Small kids and a busy job are not easy to juggle while writing in my spare time, but I will try to continue updates as much as possible. I have so many more ideas for this story I could see it going for some time.
[Report This]Date: May 29 2015 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 1a - Alex and Elise
Uh oh Elise has some competition on her hands. Hopefully Alex makes the right decision and chooses Elise over Ash.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2015 10:03 PM Title: Chapter 1a - Alex and Elise
Absolutely fantastic!!
[Report This]Date: May 28 2015 8:12 AM Title: Chapter 2 - Ash
Looking forward to future chapters ^_^
Date: May 27 2015 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 2 - Ash
Oh , a male infected makes infected women horny, no wonder Elise and Ash get so lusty for him whenever they come close to him, its not just them!
Great story you got going I hope it does not end with the women taking over and making men their slaves, it would be a horrible ending!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comment. I don't think I want to take it in the gender enslavement direction. Women want to be loved just as men do, and all evidence so far says the virus doesn't strip that from them. Of course, there are always crazies out there...